According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should, therefore, allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
As per our argument, Super screen is not able to gain viewers compared to last year, according to the report of marketing department. There might be many issues which hindered this. As it says, advertising has been a big issue. Allocating high budget to advertisement of reviews will improve this scenario. It will increase the reach of Super Screen- produced movies compared to last year.
Few missing evidences weaken this argument. Like how trustful report of marketing department is? At what extent these evaluation has been done. Evidence need to be provided. Second thing is, Are people ready for these kind of movies economically ?
Do they have access to multiplexes ? There is chances of manipulated reviews. Authentication of review should be supported. It means only advetisement of review is not the issue. Gaining trust for the reviews should also be primary concern. Alloting high budget to review advertisement won't be able to give desired results. Root level analysis is required.
There are chances of advertisement to be the only issue. Because people has given positive reviews according to argument. Natural tendencies of human are that they go for movies which are worth watching. Reviews are good that means communication gap of review is the concern. Advertising is the best way to reach individual at large scale. Increase reviewer means quality of that movie is good and a very fair opinion would have been generated.
Concluding this will be very easy. Weakenings are requirement of evidences to prove authenticity of review, economic barriers, reach of multiplexes, etc. Whereas strengthening are increase in reviewers count that too positive. So, to get better result root level analysis should be done with proper supports.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 281 350
No. of Characters: 1435 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.094 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.107 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.778 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 10.808 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.152 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.154 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.238 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.441 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.014 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... scenario. It will increase the reach of Super Screen- produced movies compared t...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this evaluation' or 'these evaluations'?
Suggestion: this evaluation; these evaluations
...marketing department is? At what extent these evaluation has been done. Evidence need to be prov...
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Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
.... Second thing is, Are people ready for these kind of movies economically ? Do they have...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'There are chances'?
Suggestion: There are chances
... Do they have access to multiplexes ? There is chances of manipulated reviews. Authentication ...
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Line 11, column 58, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... of advertisement to be the only issue. Because people has given positive reviews accor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, second, so, then, whereas, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1488.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 280.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31428571429 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86175485727 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582142857143 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 10.0 22.8473053892 44% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.4820736365 57.8364921388 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 55.1111111111 119.503703932 46% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 10.3703703704 23.324526521 44% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.48148148148 5.70786347227 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.20758483034 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252126638806 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607479727021 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802360328877 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137216572932 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889860723735 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.3799401198 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.04 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 12.3882235529 36% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.0 11.1389221557 54% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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