"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have co

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"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The letter of a school in Centerville town recommends that a compulsory driver’s education course should be given to teenagers as most of the accident occurred over the past 2 years around the town is done by teenage drivers. This conclusion is based on the assumptions that parents neither have time to teach their kids nor they have money to send their teenagers to a driving school. However, as more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned, lack of answers through the argument leads me to question its validity.

First of all, how effective can the driving course be which will be offered in the school? In other words, how good will it have an impact on the students? It is possible that students might study for passing the exam for their marks but they might not take the course as serious as it should be taken. If the above mentioned assumption is merit, then the argument is weakened.

Secondly, will there be any practical lessons offered in the course? Until and unless there is a practical knowledge on driving a vehicle, there won’t be any change just because of the class. It is possible that an apprentice cannot drive a vehicle just because he got a top grade in the course. Perhaps, teenager might think he has good theoretical knowledge so that he can drive a vehicle. This leads to more number of accidents and risk of accidents. If the above scenario is true, then the argument does not hold water.

Finally, even if the practical lessons are offered, how can they offer to a large number of students? Just to have a limited time of practical class doesn’t have an impact on the teenager driving. The young person must practice and he must get habituated to the car and roads, otherwise there might be a chance of hitting a car or tree. If the above mentioned is true, then the argument doesn’t hold any strength.

In conclusion, the argument, which stands as of now, is considerably flawed. However, if the author is able to offer more evidence and can answer above mentioned question, it is possible to evaluate the conclusion completely.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'practical knowledge'.
Suggestion: practical knowledge
...n the course? Until and unless there is a practical knowledge on driving a vehicle, there won't ...
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Line 13, column 75, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...sons are offered, how can they offer to a large number of students? Just to have a limited time o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77989130435 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63393446449 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494565217391 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7576433691 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5789473684 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205641199244 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555744488355 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715668795215 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107835555439 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893695114219 0.0628817314937 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.3799401198 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1678 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.523 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.438 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.486 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.306 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5