An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia—the scent of lavender flowers—has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument discusses the remedy for insomnia using scent of lavender flowers. It conclude that the scent of lavender flowers cures the insomnia. Further, the conclusion is supported with an experimental study. However, there are many evidences missing to support the premise of the argument. The evidens such as why the controlled room is choosen for the study? and how the controlled room is different from the normal sleeping area? Further, the tiredness of the volunteers after the third week is not mentioned in the arguments. In addition, it is possible that the most of the volunteers might have worked long in the third week which might be indiced sleeping. Hence, the study count should increase or their working hours during the third week should included in the argument. The argument needs to address these quries to strength the premise as well as the conclusion.
As stated in the introduction, the condion of the controll room should be mentioned in the argument. What if the contrll room is made to create the environment for sleeping? In that case it will not represent the actual sleeping place of the people which might possess noisy environment, filled with insects, etc. Therefore, it is important to address the contion of the controll room in which the study has been conducted. In addtion, the author should address whether the controll room is installed with airconditiones which would create perfect sleeping environment. If it is so, the evident would weaken the argument. To strengthen it, the author should consider some reduction factor in the result.
Further, the author failed to include the tiredness of the volunteers after the third week. What if the volunteers had faced the same tiredness as in the case of medication? In that case the author can not claim that the lavender cures insomnia completely. There might be possibilities that the staff failed to monitor the tiredness. Therefore, it is important to mention about tiredness to strengthen the conclusions. In addtion, with only three week time the author claims that the lavender cures insomnia in a short span of time. What if the effect lost only for 1 week after the treatment? What if the people should take continuously the lavender scent? What if the contineous expose of humen to lavender scent possess side effects? These quries should be answered by the author to strengthen the premise of the argument.
In addtion, the author state that volunteers had sound sleep in third week. What if the volunteers worked long in the third week? It might have induced them to have sound sleep. Therefore, the study should be done with large number of volunteers. In that case the conclusion can be mased strongly
On the whole, the argument laks in many evidents to support the premise and the conclusion as stated in the aforementioned paragraphs. It is very important for the author to address these quries to strength the arguments.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2389 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.895 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.403 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.594 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.452 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'concludes'?
Suggestion: concludes
...nia using scent of lavender flowers. It conclude that the scent of lavender flowers cure...
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Line 1, column 365, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...ntrolled room is choosen for the study? and how the controlled room is different fr...
^^^
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
... author can not claim that the lavender cures insomnia completely. There might be pos...
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Line 5, column 494, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cures'' or 'cure's'?
Suggestion: cures'; cure's
...ime the author claims that the lavender cures insomnia in a short span of time. What ...
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Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d take continuously the lavender scent? What if the contineous expose of humen to la...
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Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ase the conclusion can be mased strongly On the whole, the argument laks in many ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, then, therefore, third, well, in addition, such as, as well as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2457.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 488.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03483606557 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69220107357 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.397540983607 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 19.7664670659 167% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4972567245 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.4545454545 119.503703932 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7878787879 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0303030303 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240438599673 0.218282227539 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697263780976 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769849294495 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129792453451 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846448113085 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.3799401198 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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