Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author claims that the decline in deer population is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea. He presents evidence to support his claim including a report from local hunters on the decline in deer populations and another report on the prevailing global warming trends. However, upon careful examination, we can observe that the evidence provides little credible support to the author's conclusion.
First of all, the author claims that there is a reduction in deer population, but provides very little evidence to assert this position. If this is the case, the reduction in deer population has been reported only by the local hunters. However, the reliability of this information is unsubstantiated and could lead to ambiguity if it is not supported by significant data that really reflects the decline in deer populations. Therefore, The author has to provide strong evidence on the actual population decline to support his stance.
Additionally, the author assumes that the decline in deer population is caused by the deer's disability to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea, but it does not provide proper evidence to support this position. There could be several other factors that are causing a decline in the deer population. For instance, it could be caused by hunters who do not belong to the locality. Also, it could have been caused by an imbalance in the habitat required for the deer to survive. Hence, the argument would be more convincing if it could shed more light upon what is the exact factor that caused the reduction in deer population.
However, the author might not necessarily be wrong to assert that global warming could be a significant cause for the decline in deer populations, if he could provide more statistics on the effects of global warming on Canada's arctic regions, it would lead to a better understanding of the problem at hand.
In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To support the author's claim, he should provide strong supporting evidence, perhaps a reliable survey on the deer population and a detailed analysis of the reasons contributing to the decline.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/arctic-deer-live-i…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1813 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.008 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.288 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 444, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...provides little credible support to the authors conclusion. First of all, the author...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'deers'' or 'deer's'?
Suggestion: deers'; deer's
...ine in deer population is caused by the deers disability to follow their age-old migr...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12983425414 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80997891494 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441988950276 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7263594511 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.8 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.70786347227 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0822583805447 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.031833868833 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295262234422 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0542047396627 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034421586485 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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