Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that the Arctic deer population is declining because they are not able to migrate over the frozen sea. Since the deers are not able to go from one place to another, they are not getting proper food and die due to starvation. This argument is based on a lot of assumptions due to which the argument is weak and unconvincing.
The local hunters reported that the population of the deer is declining but we don’t have any evidence if that is declining due to starvation. There are chances that the count of the deer is decreasing due to excessive hunting by the local hunters. The Canada is a very cold country and the skin of the arctic deer is used in making leather jackets which is sold in the market at higher prices.
Due to the change of the weather, various wild animals like wolves and snow Tigers, which only survives in colder regions, have migrated to the arctic regions for their survival. Now, these animals feed on the local animals and arctic deers due to which their population is decreasing drastically.
The plants on which these deer survives are found abundantly on other islands. Also, the weather on the other islands is more favorable to them. Therefore, these deers might have migrated to those islands for their survival. Since, we don’t have any information about the plants and the weather on other islands. The argument is more of a assumption.
The argument would be strengthened if we have more information about the excessive hunting either by animals which feeds on these deers or by the local hunters who use their skin for leather market. Also, the information about the plants and the weather of the other islands would be helpful in strengthening the argument.
In conclusion, the population of the deer is not declining just because they are not able to migrate from one island to another. There could be various other reasons for their decreasing numbers.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1547 1500
No. of Different Words: 132 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.646 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.452 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.293 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.353 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.364 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.649 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 342, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 331.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82779456193 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56787986314 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 204.123752495 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.407854984894 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2192950647 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88235294118 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247713441243 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861768413281 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527306450545 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136566087081 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268431506669 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 98.500998004 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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