Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Every nation has a lot of major as well as minor cities and every city is unique in its own way irrespective of size. Every city has a different cultural traditions and the government must ensure that each city should be financially sounded to preserve their cultural traditions, so I partially disagree with the author’s reasoning that major cities must be funded because they represents nation’s cultural traditions.
A vast country, like India, has over 30 states and more than 4000 cities. Every city has a different cultural traditions. For example, a city like Kolkata has a lot of Bengalis whose cultural traditions are totally different than the people living in New Delhi or Mumbai. If the government is funding the major cities, the other cities would lose their charm and their culture would eventually diminish, so the government must ensure that they should fund all the cities and not just the major cities.
There are many more concerns than just preserving the nation’s cultural traditions. The most important thing which every individual needs is food, water and shelter. The government should focus more on these things rather than focusing on preserving cultural traditions. The government should focus more on providing funds to the major cities to develop them, to have more advanced technologies, to have proper roads and sanitation. What’s the point of providing funds to the major cities to preserve cultural traditions when the people’s basic needs doesn’t meet?
Preserving the cultural traditions is important but the government shouldn’t be biased and focus more on major cities and neglect smaller/minor cities. Every city deserves to be equally preserved and the funds should be allocated to all the cities equally. Also, the government should focus more on basic needs of the people rather than just preserving cultural traditions. In conclusion, the government should provide the financial support to all the cities and not just major cities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ery nation has a lot of major as well as minor cities and every city is unique in...
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Line 1, column 385, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'represent'
Suggestion: represent
...ajor cities must be funded because they represents nation's cultural traditions. A v...
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Line 2, column 110, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'tradition'?
Suggestion: tradition
...es. Every city has a different cultural traditions. For example, a city like Kolkata has a...
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Line 2, column 225, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...ltural traditions are totally different than the people living in New Delhi or Mumba...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sing on preserving cultural traditions. The government should focus more on providi...
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Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ltural traditions when the people's basic needs doesn't meet? Preservi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 33.0505617978 36% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 317.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35646687697 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86621835084 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441640378549 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 519.3 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6212403386 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1333333333 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348063971073 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140116153108 0.0831039109588 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824597786568 0.0758088955206 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256082438291 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0594707023393 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.