Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
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The above argument is a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. According to the memo, fewer people attended the movies produced by Super-Screen movies during the last year. This was reoported to be the least number in the last few years. Yet, the memo states that the number of pistive reviews by movie reviewers increased during the particular year. The memo further states that , due to the above reason, the qulaity of movies is excellent, however people lack the awareness that good movies are available. The memo, finally bring up with a resolution to mitigate the situation. It suggests that the company should allocate greater amount of its budget to increase public awareness through advertising. The memo presents an issue that is often faced by film production companies. While memo's suggestion seem to be valid and reasonable, at a glance, a further analysis reveals some of points that challenges its authencity. The memo has assumed some facts to conclude it solution.
First of all, the memo suggest that the percentage of good reviews increased while the number of people attending its movies have considerably decreased, over that last year. This statement sounds valid, but the memo does not provide the exact number of positive reviews from movie critics nor does it present the number of people attending its movies. The number of good reviews might have increased from one to two percent. Similarly, the number of people attending athe movie might have dropped by ten people compared to the last few years. Therefore, a detailed report as to the pernetage of increase and the number of viewership decreased has to be discussed to autheticate the claim of the memo.
Similarly, the memo states that the quality of movies have increased. This stsement is supported by the fact that the percentage of good reviews have increased. However, the exact number of good reviews have not been specified. It could be a case wherein, the number of good reviews have increased by one or two. This need not mean that the movies are of good quality that it should attract the people.To add on, there is also a case wherein the the number of bad reviews are more than the number of posiitve reviews. Similary, the memo states that movie reviewers or critics have reviewed the movies. What critics have reviewed need not necessarily be received by the people. Therefore, an exact number of reviews should be specified, to validate the point that good quality movies were produced.
Finally, the memo states the public has become unaware that good quality movies are available. The decrease in viwership cannot be attributed to the lack of awareness, especially when the public know about such a production company and have attended their movies in the recent years. AN exact reason have to identified. There could be cances that the people received the movie in poor taste inspite of postive reviews. Therefore, the exact reason that caused in less attendence should be analysed.
To conculde, the memo presents a superficial analysis of the isuue it states. A through analysis should be conducted. Numbers pertaining the the viewwership and the number of reviews have to be presented to autheticaate its stance on the issue
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This was reoported to be the least number in the last few years.
Error: reoported Suggestion: reported
Sentence: Yet, the memo states that the number of pistive reviews by movie reviewers increased during the particular year.
Error: pistive Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: The memo further states that , due to the above reason, the qulaity of movies is excellent, however people lack the awareness that good movies are available.
Error: qulaity Suggestion: quality
Sentence: While memo's suggestion seem to be valid and reasonable, at a glance, a further analysis reveals some of points that challenges its authencity.
Error: authencity Suggestion: authority
Sentence: Similarly, the number of people attending athe movie might have dropped by ten people compared to the last few years.
Error: athe Suggestion: ate
Sentence: Therefore, a detailed report as to the pernetage of increase and the number of viewership decreased has to be discussed to autheticate the claim of the memo.
Error: autheticate Suggestion: authenticate
Error: viewership Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: pernetage Suggestion: percentage
Sentence: This stsement is supported by the fact that the percentage of good reviews have increased.
Error: stsement Suggestion: statement
Sentence: This need not mean that the movies are of good quality that it should attract the people.To add on, there is also a case wherein the the number of bad reviews are more than the number of posiitve reviews.
Error: posiitve Suggestion: positive
Sentence: The decrease in viwership cannot be attributed to the lack of awareness, especially when the public know about such a production company and have attended their movies in the recent years.
Error: viwership Suggestion: vice ship
Sentence: There could be cances that the people received the movie in poor taste inspite of postive reviews.
Error: inspite Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: postive Suggestion: positive
Error: cances Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Therefore, the exact reason that caused in less attendence should be analysed.
Error: attendence Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: analysed Suggestion: analyzed
Sentence: To conculde, the memo presents a superficial analysis of the isuue it states.
Error: conculde Suggestion: conclude
Error: isuue Suggestion: issue
Sentence: Numbers pertaining the the viewwership and the number of reviews have to be presented to autheticaate its stance on the issue
Error: viewwership Suggestion: viewers
Error: autheticaate Suggestion: authenticate
Error: stance Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 22 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2668 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.904 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.491 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.058 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.406 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
.. The above argument is a memo from ...
^^
Line 4, column 422, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...cular year. The memo further states that , due to the above reason, the qulaity of...
^^
Line 4, column 599, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o, finally bring up with a resolution to mitigate the situation. It suggests that...
^^
Line 4, column 922, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the points') or simply say ''some points''.
Suggestion: some of the points; some points
...at a glance, a further analysis reveals some of points that challenges its authencity. The mem...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople attending its movies. The number of good reviews might have increased from o...
^^
Line 8, column 403, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...ality that it should attract the people.To add on, there is also a case wherein th...
^^
Line 8, column 443, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...To add on, there is also a case wherein the the number of bad reviews are more than the...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 443, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...To add on, there is also a case wherein the the number of bad reviews are more than the...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 81, Rule ID: THROUGH_THOROUGH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thorough' (accurate, exhaustive)?
Suggestion: thorough
...cial analysis of the isuue it states. A through analysis should be conducted. Numbers p...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 138, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...should be conducted. Numbers pertaining the the viewwership and the number of reviews h...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 138, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...should be conducted. Numbers pertaining the the viewwership and the number of reviews h...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2748.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 543.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06077348066 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5988699609 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410681399632 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 23.0 8.76447105788 262% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 19.7664670659 157% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0541850602 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6451612903 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5161290323 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16129032258 5.70786347227 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 8.20758483034 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185071227376 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644397596282 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108587112654 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112372087151 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100756719025 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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