"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
In the letter, the author concludes that by limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. The following conclusion is flawed for a numerous reasons. The argument distorts the view of the situation by manipulating facts and by providing weak evidences. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little or no credible support for author's conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered unsubstantiated.
First and foremost, the author claims that the number of mopeds should be reduced rented should be reduced from 50 to 25. This is merely an assumption made without a solid ground.In order to strengthen the argument, questions remain to be answered to rule out other possibilities leading to such an accident. Does the accident take place during day or night? If accident takes places during night than are the street lamps in proper working condition? What is the condition of the roads? Are people following the traffic rules? Does the people driving moped have valid license? Unless such info is provided, the evidence stated in the letter is not solid enough to support the argument.
Secondly, the author only takes into consideration the summer season. This again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate the link with the accidents taking place. There are chances that due to negligence of the pedestrian the accidents might be taking place. If people do not cross the roads properly or are in a hurry than too the accident can take place irrespective of the population and season.
Finally, the author tells that even the the neighboring island of Seaville limited the number of rentals due to which there was 50% reduction in the accidents which is also a baseless claim. The author only states about one of the actions taken by Seaville city council. Other precautionary measures also might have been taken which the author failed to consider. To bolster the argument, more info is needed to exclude other possibilities that may result in such accidents.
To sum it all up, I believe that argument is not persuasive as it stands. Thus in order to bolster the argument the author should have provided more solid evidence that accident taking place in Balmer Island is due to the mopeds and reducing the rental mopeds to half will reduce the number of accidents.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 420 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.527 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.91 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.574 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.261 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.576 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 344, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'reason'?
Suggestion: reason
...ing conclusion is flawed for a numerous reasons. The argument distorts the view of the ...
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Line 1, column 577, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...redible support for authors conclusion. Hence the argument can be considered unsubsta...
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Line 3, column 180, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... assumption made without a solid ground.In order to strengthen the argument, quest...
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Line 5, column 52, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...he author only takes into consideration the summer season. This again is a weak and unsupported c...
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Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... Finally, the author tells that even the the neighboring island of Seaville limited ...
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Line 7, column 37, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... Finally, the author tells that even the the neighboring island of Seaville limited ...
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Line 9, column 75, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...rgument is not persuasive as it stands. Thus in order to bolster the argument the au...
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Line 9, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lf will reduce the number of accidents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04057279236 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65205716224 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505966587112 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.4545808503 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8260869565 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2173913043 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203998098148 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478870609256 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724187964954 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121400764103 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0613887443248 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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