On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
The argument that management of Balmer Island what was implemented in Seaville to cut the number of accident thereby reducing the some rented moped by 50 percent is not entirely convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions. However, the argument do not give evidence on the type of accidents, the set of people that lead to increase the population during summer and do not give a good picture about the Seaville town.
First, the arguments assumes that reducing the number of rented mopeds per day from 50 to 25 will cut the number of accident. However, has any analysis done on the root cause of the accidents? Has they consider the quality of the mopel rented to people? has they check the quality and professionalism of the driver that convey or incharge of the mopeds? several information needed before to prove that the number of mopeds directly proportional to the number of accidents.
The arguments never address or set up the relationship between the increase population to related to the number of accidents that was recorded. How many people recorded that love to enter the morpeds? What if the number of people that came during summer does not even access the morpeds?. Moreover, information about the percentage of people that use the morpeds during summer and how the increase affects the use of mopeds.
Furthermore, the arguments omit to consider the natural disaster during this periods, by showing the level of water or raising above water, earthquake, tornado etc that could suddenly increase and affect the people over island. Also the safety measures and HSE compliance are not accounted in the argument to decide how the reduction in rented mopeds prove the need.
Conclusively, the argument wold have been strengthened if more information is given by the rroot cause of the accidents, relationship between the increase in population and accident rates and even the composure, mood of people, the professionalism the driver and HSE compliance of people in the Island. It won't be fair if what is emulated in Seaville is replicated in Balmer Island without critical putting the above in to considerations.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1754 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.698 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.43 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.692 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.38 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.657 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The argument that management of Balmer Island what was imp...
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Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...number of accident thereby reducing the some rented moped by 50 percent is not entir...
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Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[6]
Message: The pronoun they must be used with 'Have'.
Suggestion: Have
...one on the root cause of the accidents? Has they consider the quality of the mopel ...
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Line 3, column 204, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...e root cause of the accidents? Has they consider the quality of the mopel rented to peo...
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Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sider the quality of the mopel rented to people? has they check the quality and p...
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Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Has
...quality of the mopel rented to people? has they check the quality and professional...
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Line 3, column 266, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[4]
Message: Possible agreement error – use past participle here: 'checked'.
Suggestion: checked
...f the mopel rented to people? has they check the quality and professionalism of the ...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Several
...that convey or incharge of the mopeds? several information needed before to prove that...
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Line 3, column 358, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some information'.
Suggestion: some information
...that convey or incharge of the mopeds? several information needed before to prove that the number ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e increase affects the use of mopeds. Furthermore, the arguments omit to consi...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...to consider the natural disaster during this periods, by showing the level of water ...
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Line 7, column 231, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ease and affect the people over island. Also the safety measures and HSE compliance ...
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Line 9, column 352, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be fair if what is emulated in Seaville is replicated in Balmer Island without ...
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Line 9, column 370, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s emulated in Seaville is replicated in Balmer Island without critical putting t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1793.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07932011331 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8018987833 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475920679887 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.2259644287 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.533333333 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5333333333 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.70786347227 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253070971044 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805401339901 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468820253836 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140634538665 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403339989637 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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