“The city council of Smithville has instituted changes to police procedures to improve the visibility of the police force. These changes require that the town hire more police officers, budget more funds for police overtime, and direct officers to patro

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“The city council of Smithville has instituted changes to police procedures to improve the visibility of the police force. These changes require that the town hire more police officers, budget more funds for police overtime, and direct officers to patrol significantly more often on foot rather than from their patrol cars. These improvements in visibility will significantly lower the crime rate in Smithville and make its citizens feel safer.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide how likely the stated recommendation is to yield the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

Visibility of the police force can be hinged on a lot of factors but Smithville council believe that their appropriation of high budget for police overtime, direct officer patrol on foot rather than in patrol cars and increasing the number of officers will lower crime wave. On a superficial basis, this assertion can be considered logical and convincing.

However, the flaws that are presented in this argument include; not answering questions on how the police officers will be equipped. As well as how protected they will be on foot and their measured effectiveness, how the budget will be appropriated and the specific choice of schedule for overtime.

Increase in number of police officials will mean resources such as weapons, surveillance devices and radio speakers for communication will have been in-deptly thought of and provided. Provisions also will be made for training them for the task ahead especially the fact that they will fight crime on foot. Moreover, how their roles will be played whether in groups or independently will have to be considered as well. Police officials on foot can end up in uncomfortable circumstances where they will not be able to run for their lives nor protect themselves. Their effectiveness will not be good as compared to having patrol cars for chases or instances where speed will be required. Budget for overtime was not defined or explained in detail as it could mean budget for salary and not budget for resources, or budget for survey equipment and not for protective materials. The choice of schedule for overtime was not talked about in depth. The question is schedule time could be for midnight or daytime and evidence of the specific times crimes normally occur was not pointed out.

The assertion presented in the argument makes a lot of sense. Meanwhile, the questions that are supposed to be answered including police officials’ protection, budget appropriation, overtime schedule and effectiveness of the police officials was not addressed to make it convincing enough. It ends up not concluding very well that the crime rate will decrease but answering these questions will strengthen the argument.

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Average: 3.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... normally occur was not pointed out. The assertion presented in the argument mak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, while, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19943019943 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92307136946 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490028490028 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5754560054 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.666666667 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172179693348 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672320418709 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726572322953 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136897666381 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494862434359 0.0628817314937 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
The arguments are not exactly right on the point.

To argue against: 'visibility will significantly lower the crime rate', we may say something like:

maybe a lot of crimes are from Internet, or from government corruptions etc, so 'hire more police officers, budget more funds for police overtime, and direct officers to patrol significantly more often on foot' may not work.

like in this essay:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/city-council-smith…

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1779 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.806 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.678 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.059 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5