The city of Winston has two large department stores: Namen and Roscoe. Namen is known for its high-end designer fashions, while Roscoe is known for more affordable fashion options. Both Namen and Roscoe are each considering opening another store in the growing suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last three years and where the median income is $75,000. Namen’s executives argue that as population and median income increase, people are willing to spend more money on clothing. However, Roscoe’s executives believe that the suburbs are more family oriented, and therefore their store will be more profitable than their competitor Namen.
This argument is rife of holes and unwarranted assumptions. It states that there are two big stores will be opened in suburb called Salem, depending on their plans in this opening in the median of the income, the population growth and families oriented. First of all, the author should answers the following questions about the the mean of the data distriputed regarding the incomes, and families numbers in the village,
Firstly, Namen store depends on unwarranted assumptions in opening a new branch in this mentioned subrub. Firstly, the author should answer, if is this the median is enough to determine the financial status for the suburb's families or not. We know that median is conserning for t the middle number of the distributed data in the (Bell-curve normal distribution) and doesn't care about the spread of the data. For example, if the median is $75,000, this doesn't guarantee that all the peopel there have the same income beacuse could be small numbers in the outers of the data set. Thus, it not an evidence to depend on and doesn't give the store's ower any indication about the buying-power in this suburb. Thus, if the above scenario is valid; that means the argument is considerably flawed.
Secondly, regarding the second store ( Roscoe) also depends on trivial assumptions and first should provid answer, if the dependimg on survey to determine how many families are there, and if they are interesting in spending their money in buying clothes as mentioned in the argument. In case of, the number of families are extremely small, in this case, this store will not the desired profits ar sales. In addition to, if the number of families are big enough; the author should answer if they are intereseting more in buying clothes, because sometimes in such suburbs, families don't care more about fashion or buying clothes; rather they are interested in buying foods and goods and that sort of things which represent sussistance requirements. Thus, if the above situation is accurate; that menas the drwan conclusion in the original argument is weakened and doesn't hold water.
In conlcusion, if the argument as it stands now; it is considerably flawed because its reliance on unwarranted assumptions and need first to answer the mentioned questions to be feasible to evaluate the argument effectively.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1886 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.848 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.644 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.923 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'answer'
Suggestion: answer
...iented. First of all, the author should answers the following questions about the the m...
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Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...d answers the following questions about the the mean of the data distriputed regarding ...
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Line 1, column 325, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...d answers the following questions about the the mean of the data distriputed regarding ...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... the Bell-curve normal distribution and doesnt care about the spread of the data. For ...
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...r example, if the median is 5,000, this doesnt guarantee that all the peopel there hav...
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Line 3, column 617, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...us, it not an evidence to depend on and doesnt give the stores ower any indication abo...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Secondly, regarding the second store Roscoe also depends on trivial assumptio...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: BE_INTEREST_IN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'interested'?
Suggestion: interested
...any families are there, and if they are interesting in spending their money in buying cloth...
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Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...use sometimes in such suburbs, families dont care more about fashion or buying cloth...
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Line 5, column 861, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n the original argument is weakened and doesnt hold water. In conlcusion, if the ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in addition, sort of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04166666667 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68190227756 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486979166667 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.8526008958 57.8364921388 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.923076923 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5384615385 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105910960589 0.218282227539 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356530481792 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02787623533 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0578333180244 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286869754249 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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