Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase.
While it may have benefits for Sartorian to commence the production of alpaca overcoat again, this author’s argument does not make a cogent case to persuade the chief manager to do so based on increased demand. It is obvious that producing an overcoat by a company which has past experience in this field might be successful, but the author’s argument is rife with holes and assumptions and cannot convince the decision makers.
The author’s first mistake is to assume that he knows why the production of their alpaca overcoat stopped. He claims that the lack of wool fabric supply caused a cessation for the production alpaca overcoat as these two phenomena occurred simultaneously. This is a classic case of confusing correlation with causation. While there have been problems in acquiring high-quality fabric wool, and while at the same time there were a cessation in the production of alpaca overcoat, it does not follow that the decision not to produce alpaca overcoat was due to considering of dearth of high-quality fabric wool. Perhaps, the manager made that decision for entirely different reasons. The customers may have manifested an apathetic behaviour with regard to this product. The price of fabric wool could have increased, during that time, making it economically unaffordable to continue to produce alpaca overcoat.
The author’s citations to prove the high market demands for alpaca overcoat are similarly unsubstantiated. He posits that the numbers of complaints from customers has risen and there is no other rival company in market. To induce a general rule from specific examples, it is crucial that the specific example be representative of the larger group. The vice president may have asked two or three customers who were accidentally passing in front of the companies’ building. However, there may have been a lot of customers that are not interested in alpaca overcoat but are not questioned about the issue. Similarly, the author’s data base of the current rival companies may have been outdated. A number of other companies may have initiated to produce equal goods that can cover all the markets needs.
The conclusion that the company would gain a large profit in the case of resuming the production of alpaca overcoat is unsupported. If the lack of supply of fabric wool is not really the cause of the discontinuation, or as discussed above the demand is not so high in the market for alpaca overcoat, then there is no reason to believe that entering the market will bring the company a high profit. In addition, a higher price, mentioned by the author, may also affect the raw materials and equipment values so that the expenses out weigh the benefits.
While it is clear that the company can be successfully gain its fair share in the market by resuming the production of alpaca overcoat, but this author’s argument is unsubstantiated and cannot persuade the chief managers.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. read a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-argument-task-essays/following-appeared…
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 481 350
No. of Characters: 2390 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.683 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.05 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.178 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...cing an overcoat by a company which has past experience in this field might be successful, but ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lpaca overcoat was due to considering of dearth of high-quality fabric wool. Perh...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...continue to produce alpaca overcoat. The author's citations to prove the hi...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, similarly, so, then, while, in addition, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2478.0 2260.96107784 110% => OK
No of words: 481.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15176715177 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97328553378 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467775467775 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8600032331 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.9 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183318420989 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622026161337 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589631739621 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110077345636 0.128457276422 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691641691928 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.