The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and
concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village
rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children
living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more
time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This
research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid
and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The
interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will
establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other
island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument could be summarized weather Tertia childs are reared by their own biological parents or by other adults. This argument could be evaluated by providing more evidence about Dr Karp study, in order to validate Dr Karp’s proof.
Dr Karp should provide more evidence about his observations. For instance, Dr Karp should show that his interview was about a sufficient percentage of childs that representing Tertia childs and also other villages childs. Perhaps this interview was about a limited number of Tertia cholds and the wide vast number of childs were from other surrounding villages than Tertia. Thus, Dr Karp proof would be invalid.
Moreover, Dr karp should provide more evidance about his interview questions. Maybe his interview questions were focusing on childs’ biological parents, which logically reflect on the childs’ talk during the interview. Consequently, Dr Karp’s proof could be properly evaluated by providing his interview questions.
Furthermore, Dr.Karp should show the the considered Tertian childs in his interview were purely Tertia childs’ that were not influenced by any other cultures of the surrounding villages. This evidance is a main key in order to validate the proof. Maybe the childs werenot raised up in Tertia, therefore the proof would be invalid.
In addition, Dr. Karp should show that interval of time when his interview is carried out and when Dr. Filed visit. Maybe a big difference in time period, which shows that the Tertia culture have been influenced by the other surrounding villages cultures as a result of increasing trading between cultures or as a result of population gross and the distance between villages became closer so that villages were combined forming one bigger vaillage.
These prviously illustrated evidances should be clearly provided in order to evaluted Dr. Karp’s proof proverly. Whereas these evideance would either bolster or weaken Dr. Karp’s study and it’s validation.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Perhaps this interview was about a limited number of Tertia cholds and the wide vast number of childs were from other surrounding villages than Tertia.
Error: cholds Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This evidance is a main key in order to validate the proof.
Error: evidance Suggestion: evidence
Sentence: Maybe a big difference in time period, which shows that the Tertia culture have been influenced by the other surrounding villages cultures as a result of increasing trading between cultures or as a result of population gross and the distance between villages became closer so that villages were combined forming one bigger vaillage.
Error: vaillage Suggestion: village
Sentence: These prviously illustrated evidances should be clearly provided in order to evaluted Dr. Karp's proof proverly.
Error: evidances Suggestion: evidences
Error: proverly Suggestion: properly
Error: evaluted Suggestion: evaluated
Error: prviously Suggestion: previously
Sentence: Whereas these evideance would either bolster or weaken Dr. Karp's study and it's validation.
Error: evideance Suggestion: evidence
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1613 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.237 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.562 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...rder to validate Dr Karp's proof. Dr Karp should provide more evidence abo...
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... Thus, Dr Karp proof would be invalid. Moreover, Dr karp should provide more ev...
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... by providing his interview questions. Furthermore, Dr.Karp should show the the...
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...nterview questions. Furthermore, Dr.Karp should show the the considered Tertian ...
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...s. Furthermore, Dr.Karp should show the the considered Tertian childs in his interv...
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... therefore the proof would be invalid. In addition, Dr. Karp should show that i...
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... combined forming one bigger vaillage. These prviously illustrated evidances sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52117263844 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82073030128 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488599348534 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 66.833632065 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.9375 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209266324811 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941156343384 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405612369121 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133138604183 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220553372576 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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