The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island azette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author discussed the solution of the problem of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians in Balmer Island. The author did not present adequate statistics related to the accidents. The people visited to Balmer Island in summers due to beauty of the town and to enjoy their summers and they enjoy the moped rides in town. By limiting the number of rentals mopeds, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accident, moreover the statistics don't fully support to the conclusion.
The accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, in the town may be happened due to poor traffic system or due to narrow stress. The author didn't explain the causes of the accidents and concluded that the reduction in number of mopeds is the solution. It may be plausible that the accidents may be caused due to pedestrians don't follow the traffic rules and enter in red light and the speed of moped couldn't controlled by the rider.
Moreover, if the number of mopeds limited from 50 per day to 25 per day than the moped rentals may overload the moped to gain double profit because in the letter it is mentioned that the population increased to 100,000 during summers and it is the season to earn good wealth for rest of the year for rentals. By limiting the number of mopeds the number of accidents may be reduces up to assumed percent but due to overloading the mopeds the number of injured people could not be reduced.
Additionally, the author took example of Seaville town as evidence for conclusion but the other factors of the towns did not explained. It is not discussed the rise in population in summers is how much? The traffic system of the town is also not explained and the number of people injured in the accidents also not compared. On the basis of these arguments the author failed to conclude that the limiting the number of mopeds can reduces the accidents up to 50 percent. For example in lahe ladhakh people visited to enjoy the ride on bike and so many unfortunate take place for this government take safety majors in place of reduction in bikes because tourism is one of the major source of revenue.
Conclusively, the author didn't present strong points in favor of limiting number of mopeds in Balmer Island. On the basis of aforementioned arguments town council should analyse the problem in spite of reducing rented mopeds.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 1924 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.647 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.496 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.319 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...te statistics related to the accidents. The people visited to Balmer Island in summ...
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Line 1, column 473, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...moped accident, moreover the statistics dont fully support to the conclusion. The...
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Line 3, column 140, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...tem or due to narrow stress. The author didnt explain the causes of the accidents and...
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Line 3, column 324, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...idents may be caused due to pedestrians dont follow the traffic rules and enter in r...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ter in red light and the speed of moped couldnt controlled by the rider. Moreover, i...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'explain'
Suggestion: explain
... the other factors of the towns did not explained. It is not discussed the rise in popula...
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Line 9, column 26, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...of revenue. Conclusively, the author didnt present strong points in favor of limit...
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Line 9, column 227, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lem in spite of reducing rented mopeds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80195599022 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54784854579 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420537897311 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8945363895 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.75 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5625 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23177710427 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843683605399 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659600865757 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138646764547 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496193196465 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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