The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The argument explains the letter that was published under the editorial section of the Balmer Island Gazette by stating that the population of the Balmer island increases during the summer seasson. The city wants to reduce the number of accidents of mopeds and pedestrains in the Island by reducing the number of rented moped's from 50 to 30 per day during summer season. There are six companies that rents the mopeds in the Island. Previous year, the same method had been implemented by Torseau and accidents were declined by 50 percent. Therefore, the author believes that similar reduction will happen in Balmer Islands too. Although the author has tried to cover as much facts regarding the issue but there is no clarity in some of those facts. These can be easily raised to an assumption that are explained in the essay.
Firstly, the population of the Balmer island is known. There is no information regarding how much population used to increase in Torseau during summer season. Also, there is no data regarding whether the population used to increase in Torseau or not. There might be a possibilty that a lot of tourists come to stay in Balmer island and for the commutation in the islands they might need mopeds. If there would be not enough mopeds then it might have different consequence on the economy of the island which might not be a concern for Torseau.
Secondly, the author has not presented any reason for why accidents were taking place. One assumption that can be made here that reasons of accidents in both of the islands is different than each other. If the drivers in Balmer islands do rash driving then declining the number of mopeds would not be enough to reduce the accidents. Also, the moral ethics is associated with the accidents as drivers might not give much attention to what is happening to other people or one assumption can also be made that pedestrains are not following the rules made by the government. Either way, by reducing the number of mopeds is not a goof solution for Balmer island.
Thirdly, there is also no information regarding how many mopeds' renting companies are present in Torseau. If there are only two companies that rents the mopeds then by reducing the number of mopeds would not make a huge change, but if there are more than 10 companies that rent the mopeds and due to which number of accidents have been reduced matters a lot. Therefore, due to the absence of the pellucidity in the information provided it is difficult to assume that the same implementation in Balmer island would have the same repercussions or not.
Lastly, I would like to end the essay by stating that information presented by the author is not viable enough so that the condition of the two different places could be easily compared and a conclusion would have been obtained.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2288 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.515 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.503 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 670, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...though the author has tried to cover as much facts regarding the issue but there is ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...nts in both of the islands is different than each other. If the drivers in Balmer is...
^^^^
Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e islands is different than each other. If the drivers in Balmer islands do rash d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 486.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80452674897 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55702379246 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.415637860082 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.3888751693 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.19047619 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348756947157 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123131329287 0.0743258471296 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112021176238 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193765457376 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120331585291 0.0628817314937 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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