The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author’s argument that prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza will restore its business like before appears to be plausible in first sight.However on deeper analysis we find that more evidence is needed in order to ensure that prohibiting skateboarding will restore profits.There may be many reasons due to which central plaza has experienced decline in its profits and these must be examined .
Firstly it must examine ,how much decrease in the profit has occurred.It must consider ,what were the number of shoppers before skateboarding and what are the number of shoppers after skateboarding.There may be possibility that the number of shoppers in skateboarding were not much in prior to skateboarding.If this is the case then prohibiting skateboarding may not lead to profits.Also ,How much loss has occurred this must also be evaluated.If there is not much decrease in the profits or the business was already not that profitable then ,prohibiting skateboarding does not seem plausible.
Secondly they must examine why is that the public is inclined towards skateboarding.What is that thing, which attracts public to skateboarding and not to central plaza.There may be possibility that people find skateboarding more fascinating than any other thing or it has much better marketing than central plaza and public is more attracted towards there.This must be considered.If people find skateboarding more fascinating than shopping in central plaza, then if at all the skateboarding is banned or prohibited they may not see any increase in profit.
In addition to that ,taste of public must also be measured.Do people still like shopping in central plaza or not must be determined.This can be one through surveys and opinions of public.They must consider if there are any faults in their style of business like they may not marketing their things properly or people are not aware of their shops or the prices of the goods In this shops are high and many of them do not prefer to buy.Skateboarding may be cheap than the products in central plaza.In addition to all these things, they must also consider things which public wants is it readily available in their shops or not.
Thus the points mentioned in the above passages must be carefully considered before making any decision.If they find that by invention of skateboard there profits have declined very rapidly or the products which public want are not readily available or people are not inclined towards central plaza, then prohibiting skateboarding may not lead be any profitable to them.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2108 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.775 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.349 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.464 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.768 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27317073171 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18287980129 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412195121951 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 82.0 22.8473053892 359% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.597244057 57.8364921388 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 432.4 119.503703932 362% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 82.0 23.324526521 352% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.4 5.70786347227 322% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.25449101796 590% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167863378405 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113336504877 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0323852470988 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113336504877 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323852470988 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.4 14.3799401198 309% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -11.75 48.3550499002 -24% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 7.1628742515 269% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 35.3 12.197005988 289% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.47 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.63 8.32208582834 128% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 12.3882235529 258% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.8 11.1389221557 312% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 35.0 11.9071856287 294% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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