The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The basis of this argument is the fact that shoppers in central plaza have decreased and number of skateboarders have increased. The store owner concludes that if skateborading is prohibited in the plaza then they will retain the previous high level of their business. However, the store owner does not explain his reasons comprehensively. He needs to provide more evidence for the conclusion he has made.
The increase in popularity of skateboarding does not not mean that the skateboearders are specifically coming to central plaza for skateboarding. The store owner needs to provise evidence that the number of skateboarders has increased very much in central plaza due to popularity of skateboarding.
Firstly, he needs to provide evidence that the increased number of skateboraders has resulted into decrease in the number of shoppers. It is also possible that both the entities have no relation between them. It is possible that, there is a very different reason for declining in the business of the shop keepers and skateboarders have nothing to do between them. The decline in the business might result from outdated items for sale, which no one uses these days, or it is possible that there are multiple openings of diffeernt malls or shops in the same area. It is also possible that these new shops provides better rates of the same items that are being sold at central park. It is also possible that the market, in which central park store owners are in, is now saturated. Moreover, in this age of digitisation, it is also possible that people might buy the same items online instead of physically going to central park.
Secondly , the store owner blames the increase in the amount of vandalism and littering in central park to the increase in number of skateboarders. While, this might be true, the store owner needs to provide convincing evidence for the same. It is also possible that due to the presence of the skateboarders during daytime, thieves might not intend to rob the shops during the daytime, which might be benificial to the shop owners. Generally, skateboarders are in the activity area only during the day time. Hence, if robbery is committed during night time, skateboarders have nothing to do with it. Also, the store owner has not provided any evidence that the vicinity has been littered due to skateboarders only. It is also possible that many people from outside might have degraded the place.
Moreover, the owner has not provided enough evidence that how exactly his business will return to its high volume as before. It is possible that people wouldnt like to come to a place which is very old now. There might be many reasons for shoppers going to different places other than central park.
Hence, the store owner has immaturely concluded his argument and he needs to answer some questions. It seems that it will only weaken his argument further.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 485 350
No. of Characters: 2350 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.693 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.475 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... basis of this argument is the fact that shoppers in central plaza have decreased...
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...pers in central plaza have decreased and number of skateboarders have increased. ...
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...vidence for the conclusion he has made. The increase in popularity of skateboard...
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...ase in popularity of skateboarding does not not mean that the skateboearders are specif...
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...aza due to popularity of skateboarding. Firstly, he needs to provide evidence th...
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...ame area. It is also possible that these new shops provides better rates of the s...
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...f digitisation, it is also possible that people might buy the same items online i...
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...ally going to central park. Secondly , the store owner blames the increase in ...
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...owner has not provided any evidence that the vicinity has been littered due to sk...
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... outside might have degraded the place. Moreover, the owner has not provided eno...
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...e as before. It is possible that people wouldnt like to come to a place which is very o...
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...his argument and he needs to answer some questions. It seems that it will only we...
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...will only weaken his argument further.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 28.8173652695 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2419.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98762886598 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73541001503 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416494845361 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5926801386 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.76 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246274855902 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806010171041 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0801559731542 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151360781944 0.128457276422 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956904512204 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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