The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The letter although is having a good intention of training the professors, more claims are not provided for the conclusion drawn. No relation could be drawn between the statements made. A different college training programs is highlighted. But no proper relation is drawn of evidence is given for the conclusion of request by the faculty member to the University president.
On the first hand, it is said that the professors are those who teach the students. But the author is claiming that the professors are sitting with their college-aged students, to learn the things. This seems to have a loop hole. The author's is not mentioning that why the professors are offered the free tuition with their students and on what all subjects. This engenders that there are no good professors in that college, who can teach better to the students. It is also not stated that what kind of professors are made to take up the tuition. Are they new professors, or yet to take up the professor role and so on. Without these information, the author is stating that the faculty retention is more if the professors take up the tuition with their college-aged students.
The author is stating that since the Oceania university is offering the high retention for the professors to those who take up the free tuition with their college-aged students, and hence suggesting the Seatown University to accommodate such a program. This has no relationship. The faculty is stating that the program should be conducting to enhance morale among all the professors and luring new professors. There is no statement the author is making that the Oceanic University is giving free tuition to enhance morale to their professors. On the other hand, no statement is made that why tuition on morality to the faculty has to be made.
Further, the author states that purpose that Oceanic University is offering the free tuition to the professors. The author also states that purpose that the Seatown University should also conduct such programs. But the purposes of both the Universities do not match. No proper background id mentioned that why for such purpose the tuition are made avail to the professors. Without knowing this the conclusion cannot be accepted.
Thus, in total, the authors positions of statements seem unjust and hence the conclusion cannot be accepted. Still many potential and strong evidences and corroborations has to be given to finally conclude of offering the tuitions to the professors.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 411 350
No. of Characters: 2027 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.503 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.932 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.707 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.373 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.508 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
... seems to have a loop hole. The authors is not mentioning that why the professors ...
^^
Line 3, column 629, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...p the professor role and so on. Without these information, the author is stating that the faculty...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ence the conclusion cannot be accepted. Still many potential and strong evidences and...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, so, still, thus, as to, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.6327345309 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05839416058 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79637948441 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394160583942 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.8579413405 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.625 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212670692792 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652804008913 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593204340965 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123492364692 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652482506308 0.0628817314937 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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