The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The faculty committee's idea to institute a free-tuition policy for it's professors might help in enhancing the faculties morale and bring in new professors but the basis of there conclusion needs some thorough investigation and testing.
To start with, the conclusion is based upon a survey conducted exclusively by Oceania University for there professors entailing in the thoughts of professors of 'a' university. There is nothing in the letter that talks about/corroborates on the similarities/differences of both the universities: Does the university teach the same curriculum ; Is the demographic of the professors similar?.
Moreover, the letter is based on the assumption that Seatown's professor demographic is exacting to Oceania's and what holds good for latter would work good for the former as well. If Seatown's majority of the professors are young and unmarried, providing a tuition-free for their offspring's would not bring any immediate benefit rather they would be more jovial to see housing benefits.There needs to be a survey conducted to understand the needs of the professors in Seatown and drive plans towards incorporating the need of the hour.
Also, We need to understand the participation of the survey conducted by Oceania University; If only a handful of professors filled in the survey, there is a high probability that the retention policy might not hold good for the rest. We need to affirmation from the professors that adding these benefits really is a game changer for them rather than any run-of-the-mill add-on in the benefits list.
Having said that, in order to increase the retention or professors and luring in new ones the faculty committee needs to bolster there assessment with thorough research and clear assumptions on which the current conclusion hinges upon.
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Essay evaluation report
correct arguments should be:
1. maybe 'free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children' is not the only reason
2. Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty. will it work???
3. Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of luring new professors. will it work???
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 288 350
No. of Characters: 1494 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.12 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.188 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.005 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.341 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.45 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.804 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'faculties'' or 'faculty's'?
Suggestion: faculties'; faculty's
... professors might help in enhancing the faculties morale and bring in new professors but ...
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Line 5, column 386, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
... be more jovial to see housing benefits.There needs to be a survey conducted to unde...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l to see housing benefits.There needs to be a survey conducted to understand the ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, really, so, well, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 284.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37323943662 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33385037541 2.78398813304 120% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528169014085 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.830889488 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.75 119.503703932 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266846735792 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122208923911 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475097544573 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149104471347 0.128457276422 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395891255982 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 14.3799401198 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.197005988 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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