The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment building to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately one-third of its original flow. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the twenty floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
In the argument, the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment writes to the building manager to restrict the of water so that more water can be saved and this will result in reduced amount of water bill. Author provides various reasoning in terms of reduced bill, number of complaints etc.
The argument above seems well presented and appears to be relatively sound: since one third of the water flow will make the Sunnyside Corporation to pay less for the bills. However, as more light is shed and facts are concerned, the possibility of alternative explanation leads to question the validity of the argument.
First, author states that reduction in the water flow is directly propotional to the amount decrement, the corporation has to pay. Here, author did not consider there might be a chance that people will open the taps for a longer time to get the quantity of water they required. Which will make no difference in the quantity used. Furthermore, people can leave the taps open to fill the required amount and later can forget to close it and a lot of water will be wasted instead of saving.
Also, author does not think that there is a need for actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment. Without actual data how the conclusion is drawn? This is complete failure to assume and not valid to make assumption without any proper statistical data is provided.
Second, author does not mention how many complains did they receive? what is the severity of the complains. If the water pressure is low on the lower ground, the higher floors will not get water at all which will create a problem for the entire building. Also, some floors cannot have water at all and in that case there is no point of reducing the amount of water. There will be a amount associated while making the adjustments to water flow reduction and if Sunnyside corporation gets it done without proper reasoning, it might result in loss of it. They have to redone the adjustments which does not seem lucrative thought at all. Instead it will be a loss.
In summary , author does not take into account the substantial data to make the argument. It can be more persuasive if she has provided why the amount of water is reduce to one third. What was the specific reason to stick to that amount. What kind of complains were there and how they impacted the residents of the buildings. If author had have considered substantial statistical data along with charts, graph calculations things might have been different and this argument can be more cogent to understand.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2066 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.653 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.453 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.266 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 289, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... reduced bill, number of complaints etc. The argument above seems well presented ...
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Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...et the quantity of water they required. Which will make no difference in the quantity...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 489, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...water will be wasted instead of saving. Also, author does not think that there i...
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Line 17, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...on how many complains did they receive? what is the severity of the complains. If t...
^^^^
Line 17, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hey receive? what is the severity of the complains. If the water pressure is low ...
^^
Line 17, column 382, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...cing the amount of water. There will be a amount associated while making the adju...
^
Line 17, column 636, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...does not seem lucrative thought at all. Instead it will be a loss. In summary , au...
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Line 21, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...stead it will be a loss. In summary , author does not take into account the s...
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Line 21, column 342, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...idents of the buildings. If author had have considered substantial statistical data...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, third, well, while, as to, in summary, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 444.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80630630631 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52808888889 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477477477477 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6520977689 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7826086957 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 6.88822355289 247% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146130626292 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394460680228 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572315567633 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0817132278574 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570854913228 0.0628817314937 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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