The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The letter mentioned about the restriction of water flow to one third what it used to be, Indeed he mentioned that the water flow can be reduced only if shower heads gets adjusted. However, without having actual readings of the water usage he came to conclusion that change change will obtain favorable outcomes. So he insisted on following the same protocol for all twelve buildings will increase their profits. If we dig deeper into the situation, I don't think he suggested a better solution to increase their profits. Furthermore, we need more insight to understand the water flow in the apartments.
To begin with, the author mentioned all the shower heads in first three buildings adjusted to restrict the water flow, but he failed to provide the evidence that whether those 3 building people are stayed in the apartments for entire month. There may be a chance that people might went to vacation, In result they might had miss conception that water usage got reduced. Here proper investigation must be required to understand the problem and proceed accordingly.
Secondly, the author directly told that actual readings are not available after the adjustment. Nevertheless, he assumed the modification in three buildings will result in a profitable way: which seemed illogical. To correct the mistake, water usage must be marked down and should compare the both readings to perceive the situation. Based on the result the author should take the action. To extend with the statement mentioned above even after modifying he told that he did not get any complaints regarding the shower, which doesn't mean they do not have any problems. There might be chance that fewer people in the three buildings use shower, considering this statement as posit the argument was flawed.
Furthermore to add, modifying shower heads in all twelve buildings in the complex would increase their profits seemed illogical. Just because of the shower heads I do not think profits will yielded, but further survey need to be done to know how they can improve their profits and reduce the water usage.
To sum up, inorder to increase the profits the author should consider all the loopholes in the apartment and should take actions accordingly. Without proper insight into the problems in apartment he arrived at an arbitrary decision which definitely impact them negatively.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 388 350
No. of Characters: 1930 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.438 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.036 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.325 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.163 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: change
... water usage he came to conclusion that change change will obtain favorable outcomes. So he i...
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Line 1, column 453, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... If we dig deeper into the situation, I dont think he suggested a better solution to...
^^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a profitable way" with adverb for "profitable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...fication in three buildings will result in a profitable way: which seemed illogical. To correct the...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... complaints regarding the shower, which doesnt mean they do not have any problems. The...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ment as posit the argument was flawed. Furthermore to add, modifying shower heads in all t...
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Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'yield'
Suggestion: yield
...hower heads I do not think profits will yielded, but further survey need to be done to ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1972.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10880829016 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61274535568 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523316062176 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9844180384 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.555555556 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140832215599 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449658887383 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493881682991 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823006723457 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333554464839 0.0628817314937 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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