The following appeared in a memo from the Board of Directors of Butler Manufacturing.
"During the past year, workers at Butler Manufacturing reported 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than workers at nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. A recent government study reports that fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers are significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents. Therefore, we recommend that Butler Manufacturing shorten each of its work shifts by one hour. Shorter shifts will allow Butler to improve its safety record by ensuring that its employees are adequately rested."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation
The Board of Directors recommends that Butler Manufacturing shorten each of its work shifts by one hour to ensure safety and a decrease in accidents. However they fail to acknowledge certain crucial assumptions.
Firstly, it is proffered that there are 30 percent more on-the-job accidents reported by workers at Butler Manufacturing than Panoply Industries and the reason is that the latter has one hour shorter shifts than the former. However, the fact is discounted that there may be other reasons for lesser accidents at Panoply Industries. The machines may be more efficient or their operating procedure is much more systematized resulting in lesser accidents.
Secondly, the number of accidents is only compared with only one other organization. There may be other nearby factories that have the occurrence of more mishaps and accidents than Butler Manufacturing. The failure to provide statistical data about the mishaps makes this claim unjustified.
Lastly, the author posits that the only reason of the increased accidents is because of the longer work shifts and the only solution would be to make the shifts an hour shorter in order to compensate for the sleep deprivation and fatigue. But there could be various reasons to these misadventures. The workers may be mentally unfocused due to problems or physical ill. Also, there is a possibility of machines malfunctioning and the operational hazards with it.
Therefore, due to aforementioned fallacies the argument fails to make a cogent case that cutting short the work shifts by one hour would result in lesser accidents and renders itself unsound.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1335 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.215 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.883 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.331 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.641 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ure safety and a decrease in accidents. However they fail to acknowledge certain crucia...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'percents'?
Suggestion: percents
...stly, it is proffered that there are 30 percent more on-the-job accidents reported by w...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...matized resulting in lesser accidents. Secondly, the number of accidents is onl...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 256.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.359375 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96767044516 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5390625 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8337752713 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.538461538 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276485009313 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889578105122 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111516689754 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140886341393 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0959107186505 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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