The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities."Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The vice president of a food distribution company recommends to switch back to Buzzoff pest Control Company for all of their pest control services in order to save money, despite the fact that Fly-Away Pest Control Company offers cheaper services. To support his claim, he cites that their company lost $20000 worth food due to pest damage in one of their fast-food warehouses where they were receiving services from Fly-Away company. On the other hand, they lost $10000 worth in another warehouse where they are receiving services from Buzzoff. However, scrutiny of this evidence reveals that this lends a little credible support for vice president's assumption.

First, the author mentioned that they signed the contract in last year with Fly-Away company and he only points out the pest damage for last year at Palm City. He did not present any hints about the past years damages. Same goes for the second warehouse. There is no indication about the pest damage in previous years other than last year. Without this information it is impossible to measure the trend of amount of pest damage.

Secondly, the author have not implied the capacity and amount of stored food of both warehouses and the types of food in Wintervale warehouse. It is possible that in Palm City warehouse they usually stores much more food than in Wintervale. This missing quantitative data makes the argument unconvincing.

Thirdly, author overlooked relative comparison between the type and severity of pest in two different places. Even if we consider for the sake of argument that, this both warehouses are of same capacity and having similar quantity of fast food Palm City might be more prone to pest because of climate and geographical condition. Since no relative data is present, for instance food damage of the other companies due to pest for different companies.

Finally, author fail to mention the total service change of both companies from which one could calculate the saving from services of this two pest control companies.

In sum, the vice president's argument is unpersuasive in the sense that he failed to present significant information regarding the quantity of food in the different warehouses. To bolster his conclusion he should also identify the reasons behind the pest damages and other qualitative analysis between this two warehouses.

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Average: 8.6 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends switching'.
Suggestion: recommends switching
...resident of a food distribution company recommends to switch back to Buzzoff pest Control Company fo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'store'
Suggestion: store
...hat in Palm City warehouse they usually stores much more food than in Wintervale. This...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on between the type and severity of pest in two different places. Even if we cons...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for instance, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 381.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17060367454 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60208125834 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496062992126 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6252101163 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.444444444 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381719498369 0.218282227539 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106987730751 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101030575845 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181609708387 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0900412284542 0.0628817314937 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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argument 1 -- OK

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1925 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.052 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.535 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.215 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.596 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5