The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The given argument is stating that, even after Fly-away pest control company providing services to the warehouse in palm city faced, they faced 20,000 dollar loss. However the Buzz-off pest control company made only 10,000 loss , so food distribution company decided to return to the Buzz-off company irrespective of the lower price offered by the other company. But the company came to this conclusion without proper consideration and his claims lacks many evidences.
Firstly, the warehouse in different cities can't be compared so easily because there is no guarantee that the climatic conditions of the two cities are similar. Even though the Fly way company did their best to control the pests but weather conditions may fail them which may not be the case for Wintervale city. The argument mentioned about those damages are of last month, Indeed last month there may be most favorable conditions for pest growth when compared to the other city.
Secondly, the numbers which provided by the company should be more detailed that is what fraction got damaged should be prioritized instead of lame numbers. For instance, if Fly-away pest control company damaged 1/5th of the food which is 20% of the total where as the other company damaged 1/4th of the total which is 25% of the total then this comparison would make sense instead of simple numbers. How much of which should be considered here.
Furthermore, the company claimed arbitrarily that their best means to save money is to return to Buzz-off pest control company. This needs further investigation to come to such a conclusion. When Fly-away company is offering less amount, the vice-president should consider various factors which leads to profit. Without proper investigation and lacking clarity the decision to return to Buzz-off company seemed illogical.
To sum up, in order to arrive at such a conclusion one need further clarification and investigation. Without proper insight the vice-president arrived at certain assumptions which would cast most doubt on the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1682 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.097 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.666 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.216 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.351 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 165, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...y faced, they faced 20,000 dollar loss. However the Buzz-off pest control company made ...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...st control company made only 10,000 loss , so food distribution company decided to...
^^
Line 2, column 44, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...stly, the warehouse in different cities cant be compared so easily because there is ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 257, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...h of the food which is 20% of the total where as the other company damaged 1/4th of the ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23475609756 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70850857466 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548780487805 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.7645590795 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.466666667 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8666666667 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26205164921 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0842093833183 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708811468294 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142581855536 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730411982609 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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