The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors.
"Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol, the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and company profits will no doubt decrease. We therefore advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares, and other investors not to purchase stock in this company."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The author of the issue claims that there should be tuition waiver by the governor for the students who admitted to a university but are not capable of paying its fee. this is the assertion with which I generally do concur. Among the countless reasons which give adherence to my viewpoint, I will delve into the most conspicuous ones in the following paragraphs.
The first striking fact which should be considered is equality as the main principle in modern life. Indeed, nowadays lifestyle in the world is shaped based on modern principles; in addition, one of these principles is equality. The term of equality means all citizens of society should receive the same services regardless of the denizens’ race, creed, religion, gender, and financial position. this asserted claim in the prompt is eager to take a step toward this principle. Especially, this action gains more importance as it is for the sake of education. it is an obvious fact; education and knowledge possess a proliferated impact on human beings. By providing free education for monetary incapable individuals, the intelligence of the entire society will be increased.
Another equal crux point is the benefits of free education over the students’ future life. it is lucidly understandable that the financial status has a direct and cogent link with the level of education. this fact is verified by the recently released data by the Department of Economy in the Middle East Technical university in Turkey. According to this noteworthy and intelligence research, the level of the education owns approximate of fifty-four percent impact on the amount of salary that the employees could gain; higher the level of education, higher is the amount of income. By this fact, a student who experiences the misfortune of being a member of a poor family will have this opportunity to flip his destiny and work in a profitable affair and boost his or her finance level.
The last but not the lease fact is the mutual benefit of this action. Although in two above-mentioned paragraphs, the benefits of this action over the student’s life were discussed; this action is beneficial for the society too. The stand of society defines by the stands of its citizens. As the denizens have the higher-level standard, society will have a prestigious appearance in the world. The important issue is the ability of these students, the fact that they could pass the examination and selected by the university, show they are capable individuals to become a doctor, engineer, artist, and etc. All these jobs are on the list of society’s requirements. Therefore, the governor by investing the money for this type of the students actually is flourishing the future effective persons for the society. A lucid example is allocating these students in the deprived regions of the society where people do not receive a good service, however, by these students’ attendance, they will gain the most updated services. Consequently, By the rearing gained by the graduated student the entire society will have a greater condition.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons shows the adduced claim is completely current and the leader should provide the tuition waiver for the talented but economically incapable student to attend the university.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2773.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 536.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17350746269 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99319732086 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 204.123752495 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511194029851 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 891.0 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.074378406 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.92 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.44 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0122500922903 0.218282227539 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00374126672916 0.0743258471296 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00870311798334 0.0701772020484 12% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00751261814855 0.128457276422 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00714377800573 0.0628817314937 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 156.0 98.500998004 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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