The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
"Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The planning department of the city of Trasopolis want to repeat urban renewal program in other area also. Ten years ago, the city was adapted for industrial purpose and converted a large housing area for industries. Now the planning department wants to use remaining area for the same. To convert residential area to industrial the writer assumes three major assumptions which is not appropriate to take further decisions. There are following points which helps to analyze the assumptions before taking decision.
Moreover, the writer assumes that due to construction of several factories in last ten-year, the crime rate decline. Here the writer did not mention any research data or not even discussed with evidences. It may plausible that the writer said based on his own experience but there are so many crimes take place which don't even informed to police. So, without any substantial data we can’t make it strong assumption to convert the residential area into industrial area. The writer also wrote about the increase in tax revenue of the entire city increases. Tax collection is also acceptable until and unless the writer mention records of that area.
Furthermore, the writer only talks about advantages and ignores the other side of plan. There are several factories were constructed it is clear but how many are in running or in good state is not mentioned. The planning department looking for their own profit from tax revenue which is not enough to run a city effectively. Residents must transfer from their land because of governments notice but if the factories are not successfully running in the city then it's not a good plan. The department should do polite study for their plan then only it will be profitable to all.
Additionally, if there are several factories were constructed then the workers and staff members will be resident in opposite side city. To construct factories on opposite side of the city will increases difficulties for workers and staff member. They must come from far distance which make them tired and decrease the productivity of employees. The writer also mentioned that some houses and apartments are unoccupied and it's easy to adapt the land. There may possible that the people already shifted to other city because of pollution of factories. It may be possible the market of city not stay rich and people get difficulty to stay without fulfilling requirements. Despite of adapting opposite area of city in industrial area the department should make it healthy residential area for workers.
Finally, the writer's assumption has different loopholes which discussed in above discussion and concluded that the writer should analyze the project before applicable it. And do a research work to analyze the problems of that area then take decision of opposite side of the city of Trasopolis.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 465 350
No. of Characters: 2338 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.644 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.847 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 102, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...eat urban renewal program in other area also. Ten years ago, the city was adapted fo...
^^^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ere are so many crimes take place which dont even informed to police. So, without an...
^^^^
Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he writer mention records of that area. Furthermore, the writer only talks about...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 463, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...t successfully running in the city then its not a good plan. The department should ...
^^^
Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'increase'
Suggestion: increase
...ories on opposite side of the city will increases difficulties for workers and staff memb...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 14, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ntial area for workers. Finally, the writers assumption has different loopholes whic...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14439655172 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74073454655 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478448275862 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.4333096254 57.8364921388 41% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.48 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.56 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.64 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2959503917 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873968960502 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894469560909 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167938247359 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110758138632 0.0628817314937 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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