The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument
The author claims to strengthen the borders of a country in order to preserve its identity and economy. The author also describes his antipathy towards the illegal immigrants by making a proposal to send them off back to their indigenous nations. Illegal immigrants impose a huge threat on the security as well as economy of a country. Many of the world's leading nations, such as the United States, are facing astronomical amounts of challenges due to the presence of illegal immigrants. Despite, the precariousness of the situation, the author does miss out some key points extremely significant for the validity of his claim.
Firstly, the author establishes a direct relationship between the number of illegal immigrants and the economy of the country. Although, the money earned by the illegal immigrants never reaches the government in the form of taxes, these people are generally exploited by their employers and thus, never earn enough so as to cause a decline in the overall economy of the nation. Even if their remuneration or salary were to be accounted for national income through taxes, it would not have been able to make a substantial contribution.
Further, the author assumes that the presence of illegal immigrants is likely to cause a security threat. However, the radicals or terrorists that are arrested for causing national destruction hardly turn out to be an illegal immigrant. Such a terrorist might be a foriegner but an immigrant is completely disparate from a foriegner who is not a resident of that country. Conversely, many illegal immigrants have been working relentlessly, eventually resulting into the betterment of the nation.
Also, it is not entirely justifiable to exile an honest and hardworking person, just because he is eventually found to be an illegal immigrant. Although, being an illegal immigrant is indeed a crime, his contributions over several years cannot be undermined ruthlessly. There are lighter modes of punishment such as penalties and overtaxing, but to rule them out would not be entirely conscionable.
There are many other means by which the autonomy of a country can be preserved, and the suggestion of the author to strengthen border is indeed advantageous, but ruling the already present illegal immigrants is an extreme step. The ramifications of such an implementation could be drastic and dreadful.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Such a terrorist might be a foriegner but an immigrant is completely disparate from a foriegner who is not a resident of that country.
Error: foriegner Suggestion: foreigner
Sentence: There are lighter modes of punishment such as penalties and overtaxing, but to rule them out would not be entirely conscionable.
Error: conscionable Suggestion: No alternate word
----------------
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- better to argue: 'every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin'.
----------------
also need to argue:
The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders
-------------------
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1945 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.118 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.964 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.623 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...r employers and thus, never earn enough so as to cause a decline in the overall economy ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, thus, well, as to, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25526315789 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05637134805 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523684210526 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4456501657 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.470588235 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3529411765 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201004939993 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068419130394 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425322559232 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11310477336 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0087108948937 0.0628817314937 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.