The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The author states that the illegal immigrants entering a country should be returned to their country of origin as they pose a threat to the country's economy and national identity. The author cites that autonomy of any country is based on the strength of his borders. However, the argument is rife with holes and flaws because of several unwarranted assumption which need to be examined before reaching a proper conclusion.
To begin, the author assumes that a greater number of immigrants means loss of identity of the nation. The identity of a nation might not change if the number of immigrants coming into the nation, be it legal or illegal, increase. For instance, what exactly does the author mean by identity? Does it only pertain to people's skin color being white and black? If this is the case, then it may not apply to all countries as people in asian countries all have the same skin color- brown. And if, people from one country migrate from one country to another, even if illegally, would go unnoticed and this would not harm the identity of the nation. So the process would be very difficult for the government of the nation and it would not be beneficial to return them to their country.
Furthermore, the author assumes that illegal immigrants directly harm the economy of the nation. This may not always be true. For example, What if the immigrants come into the country and look for jobs? Now these jobs would benefit the nation as they are serving the country in form of their jobs. They could perhaps work in a sector where there is a dearth of workers and this would mean benefits for the nation. The assumption that these immigrants would only harm the nation would do more harm than good to the nation. The author has to produce specific evidence that the count of these immigrants would directly harm the economy of the nation.
Even if all the above assumptions are taken care of, the author also assumes that returning the immigrants would be easy for the nation to return the illegal immigrants. What if it is difficult to seperate these immigrants from the original country people? Will we know from which country did they come? Will their respective countries acknowledge these people? The author assumes answers to these questions. If the nation is not able to identify the original country of the immigrant then it can be difficult to return them, considering the costs and the time the government will have to invest in this process. And if, their respective country does not acknowledge their identities and refuses to take them back in, then this gives rise to another problem and it would cost a lot to the government. If any of the assumptions above prove unwarranted, then the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can provide specific evidence (perhaps in the form of some systematic research),about the specific threat posed to the country's economy, national identity and perhaps cost involved in the process of returning these illegal immigrants to their countries, only then can the argument be efficiently evaluated.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2596 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.772 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.484 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.148 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.816 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.593 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...an by identity? Does it only pertain to peoples skin color being white and black? If th...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 218, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , about
... in the form of some systematic research,about the specific threat posed to the countr...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2659.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 543.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89686924494 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.583576489 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410681399632 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6992462264 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4814814815 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286762626561 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911870144231 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626335550094 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190787040518 0.128457276422 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624059027141 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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