The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The petition to the city council of Centerville request to ban cell phone use on sidewalks to control sidewalk rage. The petitioner expects the ban on cell phone will yields the same results of Meiddletown. However, before this argument properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
FIrst of all, the Middletown and Centerville are hardly comparable. Because, the petitioner did not account for the similarities between these two towns with respect to its sidewalk dimensions. It is also possible that Centerville sidewalks are too narrow and imposing ban on cell phones might not solve the issue of sidewalk rage. It is safe to say that the sidewalks are occupied by the illegal vendors and this causes discomfort to pedestrians and leaves no space for the pedestrains and city council may need to worry about vacating these instead of banning cell phones.
Second of all, Centreville is a place where majority of the population are children, old age people, pregnant women or physically challanged and if they use sidewalks, it may cause discomfort for others and the remaining pedestrians may be rude because they are already late to work or stuck after this slow moving pedestrians and they might loose their temperment and it may lead to assaults, damaging the properties near by the sidewalks and eventually this will disrupt the pedesrtian traffic.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the petitioner able to answer the three questions above and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to impose ban cell phones on sidewalks.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1444 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.067 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.82 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 168, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'yield'
Suggestion: yield
...oner expects the ban on cell phone will yields the same results of Meiddletown. Howeve...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 343, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... slow moving pedestrians and they might loose their temperment and it may lead to ass...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 419, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...ad to assaults, damaging the properties near by the sidewalks and eventually this will ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 285.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89331384482 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575438596491 0.468620217663 123% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 123.507732551 57.8364921388 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 148.5 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.3 5.70786347227 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0969830459566 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440112704256 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526768023177 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0607253459369 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477655814623 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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