The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The argument strongly supports that the increase in sidewalk rage crimes are due to increased use of cell phones. The argument fails to convince numerous assumptions.
The argument assumes that the size of the sidewalk is big enough for people walking. It is possible that the population of the town has increased over past 3 years making the sidewalks even more crowded. The argument fails to justify the correct size of the sidewalk that would allow people walking on the sidewalk without bumbping into each other. It is possible that tourist attractions in the town have become more famous in last three years. Maybe, increase in tourist who are unaware of the sidewalk or traffic rules are the reason of sidewalk rage. The argument fails to consider many other reason that might be cause of the side walk rage crimes.
The argument fails to show the specific data or proof that supports the Middletown reduced the sidewalk rage crimes due to the ban of cell phones on side walk. It does not provide the location crime rate. It leaves with many unanswered questions like, did the crime rate of the location was same, the average age of the location, population of the location. Also the argument assumes which happened in past three years will continue in future as well. It is possible that some popular event happend in the town which made the sidewalks crowded, leading people bumping into each other. Year end sales, thanksgiving offers or new iPhone launch might lead to concentration of huge crowd at the same location. That would lead to sidewalk rage. But the argument baselessly focuses on cell phone use instead of considering other factors. Hence it is possible that the provided conculsion of reduction in sidewalk rage related crimes will not be true.
The argument fails to explain the use of cell phone make people bump into children because of their short height. In fact, when phone users usually looking down at their screen not looking up. Hence, it is highly unlikely that because of the cell phone use people bump into children.
The argument fails to consider many significantly important reasons such as side walk size, the location and population change. Hence does not justify the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1811 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.829 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.35 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.019 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.318 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.336 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.516 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.073 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to convince numerous assumptions. The argument assumes that the size of the s...
^^^
Line 5, column 616, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...o consider many other reason that might be cause of the side walk rage crimes. The...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 359, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e location, population of the location. Also the argument assumes which happened in ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 833, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...e instead of considering other factors. Hence it is possible that the provided concul...
^^^^^
Line 17, column 129, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ze, the location and population change. Hence does not justify the conclusion.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, may, so, well, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.976 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3967177556 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477333333333 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3152918711 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.8181818182 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 23.324526521 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.68181818182 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102172348165 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.03732590865 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040344319911 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581571036903 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499052833889 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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