The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The writer asserts the council should pass the ban to stop pedestrian texting or cell phone using when walking on sidewalks by providing several reasons. However, I disagree the petition since the rationales provided sound questionable to me. Here are my reasons:
Firstly, there's no evidences showing a correlation whether the more walkers using cell phones when walking, the more traffic accident happened afterwards. Despite people use cell phone may slow their walking pace, we can't conclude that's the reason of most car accidents happening in Centervile. The writer needs to at least present some effective data to show the cause and effect between the cell-phone usage and the car accident.
Also, we should examine the reasons of the increasing car accident happened over the past three years. Perhaps, Centerville has become an urban city so many immigrants have been coming to there since three years ago. And that grows the population larger, hence increases potential traffic accidents possibilities.
Last but not least, the writer provides a similar law enacting by Middletown, proved the sidewalk crime has decreased then, asserting Centervile may have the same result as Middletown. However, he commits a false analogy between two different cases, since we are unsure the demography, or car-owning rate of these two places, These uncertain information makes the result unpredictable.
To conclude, the author needs to present more details provided above to make the petition sound warranted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, so, then, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 19.6327345309 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1280.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 235.0 441.139720559 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44680851064 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.56307096286 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7149669836 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.689361702128 0.468620217663 147% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7641578958 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.363636364 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3636363636 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0810047951903 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340345402959 0.0743258471296 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351381380653 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0467747554621 0.128457276422 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439724420947 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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