The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The evidence used here is to ban the use of cellphones to reduce the incidents of sidewalk crime, is seemingly not with a powerful base. As the petitions states that there has been an increase in the sidewalk rages, it doesn't clearly shows us that it is due to the use of cell phones. It may due to some other reasons like not following the rules of waling or cycling on the sidewalk, or a citizens personal issue with anger whch he/she was trying to drain it out on a stranger. Similarly it may be the case with the drivers as well, who may not be follwoing the STOP signs or respecting the zebra crossings for pedestrains which may lead to quarrels.
The next thing the argument states is that the results of sidewalk rage includes assaults. property damages and distruptions of normal pedestrian traffic, it doesn't directly show any eveidence that the results are because the use of cell phones. The assaults may be due to extraction of money or some other crime that are being commited. The property damages may be a case of increase in drunk and abuse. Or disruption in pedestrian traffic may be becuase of some personal conflicts between the strangers on a common matter. It doesn't, in anyway imply that banning of cell phones will be able to solve the above mentioned problems in this city.
The argument is then backed up by the statement that it has helped Middletown in reducing sidewalk rage by imposing this law. But it doesn't give any more information about the other laws Middletown has imposed. it may be that along with stricter laws on cell they would have imposed even more strict laws on alcohol consumption and getting into a quarrel when a person is drunk. They might have even increased fines in getting involved in activities that may affect the general public. Or they have even started teaching manners and ethics to their citizens for not engaging in such activites and handling them with utmost calm and composed manner.
In conclusion, ther isn't enough valid statements to ban the use of cell phones on sidewalks, and givng the exampls of another city doesn't support any of the statements.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 379 350
No. of Characters: 1718 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.412 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.533 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.464 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.071 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.246 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n an increase in the sidewalk rages, it doesnt clearly shows us that it is due to the ...
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Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a citizen' or simply 'citizens'?
Suggestion: a citizen; citizens
...f waling or cycling on the sidewalk, or a citizens personal issue with anger whch he/she w...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...s trying to drain it out on a stranger. Similarly it may be the case with the drivers as ...
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Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Property
...lts of sidewalk rage includes assaults. property damages and distruptions of normal pede...
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Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ptions of normal pedestrian traffic, it doesnt directly show any eveidence that the re...
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Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...en the strangers on a common matter. It doesnt, in anyway imply that banning of cell p...
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Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: IN_ANYWAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in any way'?
Suggestion: in any way
...trangers on a common matter. It doesnt, in anyway imply that banning of cell phones will ...
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Line 5, column 134, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ewalk rage by imposing this law. But it doesnt give any more information about the oth...
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Line 5, column 212, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... the other laws Middletown has imposed. it may be that along with stricter laws on...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...olved in activities that may affect the general public. Or they have even started teaching man...
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Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
... composed manner. In conclusion, ther isnt enough valid statements to ban the use ...
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Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
..., and givng the exampls of another city doesnt support any of the statements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, may, similarly, so, then, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70967741935 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50386884131 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52688172043 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9030269441 57.8364921388 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.5 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0829280690374 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0306938693236 0.0743258471296 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334041774617 0.0701772020484 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0492858228253 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366258521875 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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