The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books. "We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
The board of directors of monarch books recommend that the monarch books open should open a cafe in its store, with discountinuing the children's books sections. To buttress their argument, the board cites the following evidences: first, opening cafe would attract more customers; second, percentage of population under age ten is declining; third, opening a cafe can better compete with whichregal books recently opened its own cafe . Tough the issue has its own merit, due to lack of convincing evidences and unaddre...
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 6
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 617 350
No. of Characters: 3134 1500
No. of Different Words: 282 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.984 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.079 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 214 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 174 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 118 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 90 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.713 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 535, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...regal books recently opened its own cafe . Tough the issue has its own merit, due ...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
...rch books is beneficial to drawing more customers attention. The assumption, however, is ...
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...e assumption, however, is questionable. it is well known that the popularity of th...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...f wide selection of books all subjects. it is plausible that people come to read b...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ll be engendered, which disturbs people who are imursed in reading. Readers, no longer ...
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Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...book in the monarch books will decline. what if the total population increases inste...
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Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...t represent the condition in this city. it is possible that educational resources ...
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Line 5, column 516, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...that educational resources are rich and economical system is robust in this city. The resi...
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Line 5, column 618, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ll as kids under ten, are considerable. if, furthermoer, parents put more focus to...
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Line 5, column 789, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...childrens book perhaps increases a lot. it is expected that the overall sale of ch...
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Line 7, column 239, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...eristics between these two book stores. even if the cafe contributes positively to a...
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Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
...action might not work in monarch books. what are the locations, popularity, book pri...
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Line 7, column 732, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...tracted to it solely owing to the cafe. there are also many other approaches to make ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 55.5748502994 149% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3263.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 608.0 441.139720559 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36677631579 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13489768742 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 204.123752495 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490131578947 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 992.7 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.0710203272 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.517241379 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9655172414 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13793103448 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33736472446 0.218282227539 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901626744592 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861474716114 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207459040974 0.128457276422 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516483834306 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 98.500998004 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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