The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."
The Board of Directors of Monarch Books recommends to open the cafe in its store, because of its significant existence from the past twenty years with large customer base and it is well known foe its wide selection of books on all subjects can attract even more customers. And cafe is replaced in the location where children's book section are kept and due to decline the population under 10 years of age, which is stated by the national census is taken under consideration for this move. And mainly opening a cafe can attract more customers and it is even better to compete with Regal Books,which recently opened its own cafe. I find this argument as illogical, defective, and irrational due to its inherent weaknesses.
Weaknesses in the Argument :
Firstly, the assumption made by the Board of Directors about the opening a new cafe in the store of Monarch Books based on the assumption that as it is more popular in the society about its wide selection of books and having large customer base can attract even more customers. This seems to be an defective assumption, how can they predict or recommend that opening a cafe in its store can lead even more customers to them? Proper evidence related to this statement is not provided by the Board of Directors.
Secondly, only on the based on the national census Board of Directors recommended to open the cafe in the place of Children's book section and override them. And without a proper evidence that relating the lacking of sales of Children's books in their store. And their might be a very few effect in the sales of Children's books due to decline in the population under 10.
Thirdly, and most importantly this recommendations by Board of Directors main assumption that it can compete with the Regal Books, which recently opened its own cafe in its store. This seems to be the most irrational statement because based on the other competitors strategy which rose well, and implementing same strategy on the Monarch Books may not rose well assimilar. Because the Board of Directors had no evidence or proof regarding that can be even better performed in the Monarch Books.
Finally, recommendations given by Board of Directors are seems to be irrational and defective because of the evidence is lacking the statistical evidence.
My Remarks:
As i have unravelled the defects in the argument, I strongly recommend the Board of Directors to withdraw its suggestion, conduct concrete research on the subject before it can provide any genuine advice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 424.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94811320755 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73533839306 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417452830189 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7214772794 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.866666667 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2666666667 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366955502504 0.218282227539 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131131969931 0.0743258471296 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948821403332 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169894937878 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0992068490078 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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