The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a five-hundred-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read costs only $500 per employee - a small price to pay when you consider the benefits to Acme. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
The argument about recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company suggests that to employees of Acme should take the Easy Read course which will improve productivity. They also provide some arguments about this recommendation. However, author fails to answer certain questions which are necessary to conclude that recommendation will improve productivity or not.
Other companies recently stated that their employees have taken the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course and this increase their productivity. However, author should provide information about these companies. What is their main business about and how other company’s employee’s productivity techniques will surely improve Acme's employee productivity. Two different types of company have different types of employees. Improvement in one company may not surely improve other company's productivity. Thus, author should provide more details about other companies and how they are relatable to Acme.
In addition, one graduate of the course was able to read a 500 page report in two hours and another graduate rose from an assistant to vice president of the company in under a year. These details provide information that without taking course acme's employee can also achieve more. Therefore if they have knowledge about their field, then they must achieve anything. There may be a chance that who become assistant to vice president may have other skills. Thus, author should also provide details of these employees and accurate information.
Easy Read cost Acme 500$ per employee with three week seminar in Spruce City and lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. However, not all employees need this course. Some have a good knowledge about this course. Author fails to answer how this course will increase productivity of employees. There should other reasons as well which will help to increase productivity. Three week of seminar may stall companies on going work. And author should provide details how this will surely help to improve productivity. There no strong evidence that after taking this course productivity will surely increase. Thus, author fails to provide strong evidence for his recommendations.
To sum up, recommendation about employees of Acme to take the Easy Read course were weak. Author fails to provide details which are necessary to strong his arguments. Author should provide details about how other companies improvement help Acme. Author should also answer about what are other skills which make a graduate assistant to vice president. Author fails to provide strong evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not exactly right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2173 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.432 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.529 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'acmes'' or 'acme's'?
Suggestion: acmes'; acme's
... information that without taking course acmes employee can also achieve more. Therefo...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e acmes employee can also achieve more. Therefore if they have knowledge about their fiel...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 21, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...te information. Easy Read cost Acme 500$ per employee with three week seminar in...
^^^^
Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'seminar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'seminars'.
Suggestion: seminars
... Acme 500$ per employee with three week seminar in Spruce City and lifelong subscriptio...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 423, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
...ree week of seminar may stall companies on going work. And author should provide details...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
... should provide details about how other companies improvement help Acme. Author should al...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... other companies improvement help Acme. Author should also answer about what are other...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 352, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...a graduate assistant to vice president. Author fails to provide strong evidence.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in addition, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.838657253 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0699921387 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8571428571 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2857142857 23.324526521 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82142857143 5.70786347227 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363260198987 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105942006487 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12553438124 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236459163721 0.128457276422 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095551668347 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 48.3550499002 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.55 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.32208582834 81% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 98.500998004 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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