The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company. "Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee - a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
In citing that the employees productivity of a lot of companies has greatly improved due to their participation in the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course, as well as the fact that one graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours and also about how another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year, the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company has concluded Acme Publishing Company would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course. However, the author's assertion as it currently stands, rests on three unwarranted assumptions.
First of all, the the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company, presumes with no justification that the siurvey carried out on the companies that have participated in the course is without bias. In taking the data at face value, the personnel director further assumes that, many companies that stated the improval of its staff productivity as a result of the course, is a representative of all companies that have witnessed its employees overall improval. The most important part of a survey is its methodology- in that case, if only 3 out of 30 companiesthat have participated in the course were interviewed, it would be discovered that many companies may wish that the didn't allow their staff to participate the the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Therefore, without convincing evidence to counter the scenerios above, the author's argument is not viable.
It may be true that $500 per employee is a small price to pay by a company that has a smaller employee size, but the author's argument that it would be a negligible price for Acme, is rife with holes. Perhaps Acme has an employee size of over a thousand and its profit is far less than the amount required for all its employee to participate in the course. Perhaps if the had an employee range of 4-5, then the argument would have been significantly strenghtened. Even if the Acme has a small employee size, it could be that the company faced a great loss that year and can not be able to afford to pay for the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course for its staff.Therefore, if any of the above is true, then the argument is significatly weakened.
Finally, even if Acme is able to afford the cost of all employee participating in the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course, are the employees willing to participate in the course? It could be that the employees have a different catalyst that improves that productivity rather than a mere Speed-Reading Course. Perhaps all the employees in Acme are already fast readers and still their productivity has not improved. Morever, the author claims that reading a long report very fast, would move an employee up the organogram of a company. Maybe implementing the participation in a totally different course, like a team- player course would improve the productivity of the company. So, if the author had provided evidence on the willingness of Acme employees to participate in the speed reading course, then the argument would be more substantive than wishful.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands, is considerably flawed due toits reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author had provided evidence , perhaps, in form of a well systematic research study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the author's argument for Acme to increase the productivity of its staff by participating in the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 592 350
No. of Characters: 2888 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.933 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.878 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.953 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 161 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 123 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.712 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.37 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
In citing that the employees productivity of a lot of companies has ...
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Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...of companies has greatly improved due to their participation in the Easy Read Spe...
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Line 1, column 579, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...take the Easy Read course. However, the authors assertion as it currently stands, rests...
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Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...unwarranted assumptions. First of all, the the personnel director to the president of ...
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Line 2, column 15, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...unwarranted assumptions. First of all, the the personnel director to the president of ...
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Line 2, column 557, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...its methodology- in that case, if only 3 out of 30 companiesthat have participate...
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Line 2, column 694, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...d that many companies may wish that the didnt allow their staff to participate the th...
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Line 2, column 733, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... didnt allow their staff to participate the the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Therefo...
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Line 2, column 733, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... didnt allow their staff to participate the the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Therefo...
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Line 2, column 848, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nce to counter the scenerios above, the authors argument is not viable. It may be true...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...at has a smaller employee size, but the authors argument that it would be a negligible ...
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Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...Read Speed-Reading Course for its staff.Therefore, if any of the above is true, then the ...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ons. If the author had provided evidence , perhaps, in form of a well systematic r...
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Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... to fully evaluate the viability of the authors argument for Acme to increase the produ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2943.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 590.0 441.139720559 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98813559322 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03151053831 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405084745763 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 927.9 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.410345731 57.8364921388 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.5 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.7777777778 23.324526521 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438883340562 0.218282227539 201% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143532729629 0.0743258471296 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118655728374 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277152748902 0.128457276422 216% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126881214042 0.0628817314937 202% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 27.0 11.9071856287 227% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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