A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money."
The argument proposes that Monroe is a city of jazz music lovers. Hence, establishing a jazz club at Monroe will be very profitable. The owner supports is decisions with proposing the data collected recently. There are no jazz clubs upto 60 miles of the area around Monroe and at average jazz lovers spend at least a 1000 dollars every year on jazz music. In addition to that it is been observed that more than 100,000 people attended the jazz festival last summer and most people of Monroe are jazz lovers. After looking on to the various data it is very persuading to accept the decision. But, When we look in to the data very closely one can figure out that reasoning of the argument is logically flawed. It relies on assumption which appear unsupported due to lack of data.
Firstly, the owner proposes that there are no jazz clubs up to 60 miles around the city. This can be a positive sign but, it can also be interpreted as even though their are no jazz clubs near the city, why did other businesses did not think of establishing a jazz club. Also, it is possible that few others are also planning to open a jazz club in the same city which will deteriorate the profit scale assumed by the C Note owner. Hence, their is most investigation needed to support the assumption.
Secondly, As an evidence, owner states that more that 100,000 people attended the Monroe's jazz festival and hence the number of jazz lovers are large in number. If we look at the statement more closely one can conclude that owner fails to mention whether people attended the festival were all from Monroe itself or they also included people from other regions. If that is true than this statement gives negligible support to the decision. Hence, the survey information is completely vague until we have more data regarding exact people from Monroe attended the festival. Moreover, even if those many people from Monroe attended the festival, one cannot say that all of them are actually jazz lovers. It is also possible that people attended to just figure out what jazz music sounds like and may be some of them didn't like it. In such situations the statement becomes completely vague. It would have been helpful if their was a survey made during the festival to ask people their feedback. That data would have been helped to filter out people who actually liked jazz Music.
Thirdly, owner proposes his last point that in nation wide jazz fan spends close to 1000 dollars on jazz Music. But, how much percent does Monroe's people constitute out of these people is a valid question which owner doesn't mention. It is possible that only 10 percent of nation wide people are in Monroe who love jazz and wish to spend so much for jazz entertainment. This makes me realize that statement needs more backup and more accurate data.
Hence, to conclude, I would say that, Argument fails to recommendation acceptable. The assumptions need for relevant data to support themselves. Argument needs to be strengthened by more data and solid facts without any flaws. Otherwise, with the given data it is recommended to owner not to make the decision of opening C Note in Monroe.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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also need to argue:
several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 552 350
No. of Characters: 2546 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.847 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.363 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.034 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.632 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.69 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.301 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.475 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 509, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... most people of Monroe are jazz lovers. After looking on to the various data it is ve...
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Line 1, column 661, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ata very closely one can figure out that reasoning of the argument is logically f...
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Line 4, column 165, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... can also be interpreted as even though their are no jazz clubs near the city, why di...
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Line 4, column 440, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ale assumed by the C Note owner. Hence, their is most investigation needed to support...
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Line 7, column 145, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: large
...and hence the number of jazz lovers are large in number. If we look at the statement more close...
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Line 7, column 362, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lso included people from other regions. If that is true than this statement gives ...
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Line 7, column 688, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'jazzed'.
Suggestion: jazzed
...annot say that all of them are actually jazz lovers. It is also possible that people...
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Line 7, column 813, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...sic sounds like and may be some of them didnt like it. In such situations the stateme...
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Line 10, column 48, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
..., owner proposes his last point that in nation wide jazz fan spends close to 1000 dollars o...
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Line 10, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... people is a valid question which owner doesnt mention. It is possible that only 10 pe...
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Line 10, column 273, Rule ID: NATION_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nationwide'?
Suggestion: nationwide
... It is possible that only 10 percent of nation wide people are in Monroe who love jazz and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, at least, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 550.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75818181818 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42825584449 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450909090909 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 819.9 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.055563608 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2413793103 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9655172414 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 8.20758483034 256% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284451035394 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806487282761 0.0743258471296 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793312460984 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162123295257 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752138507537 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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