A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. At present, the nearest jazz club is over 60 miles away from Monroe; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. In addition, there is ample evidence of the popularity of jazz in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly.' Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument surmises that the new C Note jazz club will gain a big profit in the Monroe. To support this assumption, the author reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning, and distorted view of the situation. Hence the argument is unconvincing.
First of all, the author posits that the distance of the 60 miles away from the present jazz club is an adequate length for the C Note club to have its local market. However, this is a vague surmise. There is a list of unwarranted question about this assumption. For instance, what is the present service capacity? Or what scoop of area does the current club cover? Maybe, the service of the current club includes the local with a radiation of 100 miles; in this case, the 60 miles distance is not a sufficient distance for the C Note club to appeal its consumers and make its market. Without addressing this question with the concrete data about the present club statue and its service scoop, it is a facial claim.
Next, the writer posits that the jazz music is the most popular music among the people, for the sake of high participant in Monroe's jazz festival last summer and the dwelling of the famous jazz musicians in the Monroe. These assertions cannot be accepted as they stand. The argument could have been much fortified if it explicitly answered these questions. First, did whole or the significant portion of the attenders were the dwellers of the Monroe? Perhaps, the other people from the near cities, how are the fan of the jazz music, attended the festival. Second, does the main reason of well-known jazz musicians living in the Monroe is the popularity of the jazz music in this city? Perhaps, this location possesses a cool weather which appeals the people, or its housing cost is lower than the other area.
Finally, the article mentions to the nationwide survey, which demonstrates the jazz fans are prone to spend 1.000 $ for jazz entertainment yearly and overgeneralized its outcome to Monroe's inhabitants. This study and accuracy of its outcome in this city would have been more convincing, if the text mentioned to the several questions about the Monroe people's financial status, and validity of this study in the Monroe. For instance, what is the people's financial standing? Or how much the people in this city earn yearly? Maybe their annual incomes do not exceed 2.000$; in this scenario, the expense of 1.000$ for the jazz entertainment is too much.
All in all, the argument is flawed for the reason above-mentioned and is; therefore, unpersuasive. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly addresses the aforementioned questions. Without this information, the argument remains unsubstantiated and open to debates.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 457 350
No. of Characters: 2201 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.624 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.28 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.321 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.48 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.486 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...g, and distorted view of the situation. Hence the argument is unconvincing. First ...
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Line 8, column 111, Rule ID: CURRENCY[2]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$000'.
Suggestion: $000
...ates the jazz fans are prone to spend 1.000 $ for jazz entertainment yearly and overg...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 566, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$000'.
Suggestion: $000
...be their annual incomes do not exceed 2.000$; in this scenario, the expense of 1.000...
^^^^
Line 8, column 607, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$000'.
Suggestion: $000
...00$; in this scenario, the expense of 1.000$ for the jazz entertainment is too much....
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 457.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98249452954 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74391956907 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492341356674 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.9723582099 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.08 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.28 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278660513623 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696423437636 0.0743258471296 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900963104492 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138226758817 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761582832736 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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