Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Author claims that Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling food is expanding its franchise by opening up in Plainsville. He also claims that the franchise will prove to be highly successful. At first, this argument might look well justified, however, on scrutinizing, one can state that apparently the argument stated is ill considered and flawed.
First, author states that Nature's Franchise tend to profitable in areas where people lead healthy life style and groups Plainsville with those areas. However he does not present with any substantial proof for the same. He does not provide us in figures, the population that bought health products, in areas where Nature's Way was successful. The percentage of population that showed interest in buying food products previously would have made the argument more concrete. The report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time high is purely based on honesty of the merchants. Even if the sales are on high, it does not support the fact that all the shoes and clothes bought are utilized for sole purpose of exercising.
Second, the argument lacks credibility when it states that local health clubs and aerobic training classes are fully occupied. Author does not provide us with any statistics to support the claim. In absence of specific sales figures, it is futile to jump to hasty conclusions. Even if the local health clubs are full, that does not mean that majority of the population is health conscious. It might well be that there are only few health clubs available in Plainsville which leads to their flooding.
Thirdly, the argument relies on the assumption that school children will be the potential customers. Although children are required to participate in a fitness programs, but that does not guarantee that they will use the health products of Nature's Way to stay fit. They might prefer to stay in shape by exercising daily in the same health clubs that the author was talking about earlier.
The argument would have been more comprehensive if author would have presented absolute figures and statistics to support his claim. More specific details about both Nature's Way and Plainsville would have made the argument persuasive. Due to erroneous assumptions and insufficient data the argument put forward is specious.
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Essay evaluation report
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argument 1 -- In GRE, we have to accept all data or evidence are true. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. This is wrong:
First, author states that Nature's Franchise tend to profitable in areas where people lead healthy life style and groups Plainsville with those areas. However he does not present with any substantial proof for the same. He does not provide us in figures, the population that bought health products, in areas where Nature's Way was successful. The percentage of population that showed interest in buying food products previously would have made the argument more concrete. The report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time high is purely based on honesty of the merchants.
this is correct:
Even if the sales are on high, it does not support the fact that all the shoes and clothes bought are utilized for sole purpose of exercising.
argument 2 --
This is wrong:
Second, the argument lacks credibility when it states that local health clubs and aerobic training classes are fully occupied. Author does not provide us with any statistics to support the claim. In absence of specific sales figures, it is futile to jump to hasty conclusions.
this is correct:
Even if the local health clubs are full, that does not mean that majority of the population is health conscious. It might well be that there are only few health clubs available in Plainsville which leads to their flooding.
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1894 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.037 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.551 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.729 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed for sole purpose of exercising. Second, the argument lacks credibility w...
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Line 11, column 59, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had presented'?
Suggestion: had presented
... have been more comprehensive if author would have presented absolute figures and statistics to supp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, third, thirdly, well, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17819148936 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63370261916 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.9311206363 57.8364921388 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 97.35 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233676441967 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0713343198099 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949552338624 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129171203651 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075543591548 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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