Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument states that, Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child and that conclusion is based in the premises that, that school has the most intensive program and the teachers of the school danced in some prestigious ballet companies and many of the students of the school become professional dancers with top dance companies. However, in deeper analysis, it become evident that, some relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
First problem with the recommendation is that, a dance school doing good in it's sector does not mean every child should be attracted to that school. Children loving dance or some cultural activities may love to go Pirouettes Ballet School, but that school is the clear choice for any child is an exaggeration in wider angle. The author of the argument should have clarify that issue to make his argument strong.
Similarly, the recommendation states that, Pirouettes Ballet School's teachers danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world, which may indicate that the teacher's quality as an individual dancer is really good. But that does not guarantee that the those people is also excellent in teaching. In many of the cases, we can see that, a good knowledgeable person does not represent a good teacher. So, if the recommendation was concerned in ensuring teacher's quality, it should have provided some information regarding their teaching success like certification as teacher, awards in teaching technique and so on.
The recommendation also claims that, many of the students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies. But the problem is, that information does not represent the whole students community as it is not specified in any percentage of number. Maybe a good number of students is doing good in dance industry but at the same time we can not discount the fact that, many more is stumbling to survive in the same field. Moreover, those students who are doing good in professional field, is that only because of the school's quality and teacher's dedication or due to the student's passion and hard work. Those questions need to be answered to strengthen the recommendation.
So to conclude, the argument lacks information and seems to provide irrational assumptions and logical flaws. The conclusion of the recommendation seems tenuous due to lack of concrete evidence and logical reasoning. The author should have provided more rational logic to substantiate his viewpoints and to make the recommendation more cogent.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...panies. However, in deeper analysis, it become evident that, some relevant aspects hav...
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Line 2, column 364, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'clarified'.
Suggestion: clarified
... The author of the argument should have clarify that issue to make his argument strong....
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Line 4, column 533, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...onal field, is that only because of the schools quality and teachers dedication or due ...
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Line 4, column 587, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...y and teachers dedication or due to the students passion and hard work. Those questions ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, similarly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 421.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19239904988 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90888639415 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451306413302 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.1859078238 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.588235294 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94117647059 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383693693744 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106964283176 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138146246128 0.0701772020484 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217389293495 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129107001362 0.0628817314937 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.