Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Pirouettes Ballet School as claimed has the most intensive programs with reputation of dancing in high ranked company and their students have also been professional. But can all of these claim actually be sufficient to regards as the number one choice for any aspired child who is interested in dancing? Let look at it these ways; so has human being has many taste has not left children out also, dancing all over the world in prestigious industries seems not considering that other dancers from other industries could have been in competition with them and vanquished them? The author also neglected the fact that the parent of the children will most likely glean information from other industries and compare different schools before enrolling their children and for the school to claim as the best, when was it invented. These are all the questions that needs to answered in order to satisfactorily claim the best.
Children are found of vacillating their on things even if there are no limpid differences. Same thing for choosing dancing school. Parents taste most times seems to be in tangent with their children because they want to satisfy them and ensure their happiness and not been deriding by other children. So if a children who does not like the kind of friends he sees or mingles with in Pirouettes school will likely not go for the school and eventually neglecting their achievements but focus on their taste.
Also dancing schools are regarded as highly competitive mainly when they compete in the world with other dancers. Yes, this is what Pirouettes school does by dancing in the prestige schools. However, what are the ability of their dancers as compare to others? By going to industries to dance, they will most likely compete with other dancers, though not every time, and the outcomes are basically what the author should emphasize on; whether they made first position while they compete in the industries then, it can be ascertain that they highly recommended for any children.
The author neglected the fact that most parents will source for information from different schools, in order to juxtapose various schools and get a perfect recommendation. How about if the parent realized that they are more prestigious schools in their vicinity whom they preferred base on reputation and other factors such taste and location to their house? So in essence the school should not be justified just
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 402 350
No. of Characters: 1986 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.478 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.114 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 355, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun taste seems to be countable; consider using: 'many tastes'.
Suggestion: many tastes
...t it these ways; so has human being has many taste has not left children out also, dancing...
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Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to dance'.
Suggestion: to dance
...id differences. Same thing for choosing dancing school. Parents taste most times seems ...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a child' or simply 'children'?
Suggestion: a child; children
... been deriding by other children. So if a children who does not like the kind of friends h...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...evements but focus on their taste. Also dancing schools are regarded as highly ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, so, then, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04975124378 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57523126033 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487562189055 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7066348855 57.8364921388 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.875 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270209693534 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103677834145 0.0743258471296 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894461267276 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165658080797 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928233413438 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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