Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The conclusion that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child is based on insufficient evidences that attest to this argument.
While it says that the school has the most intensive program, there isn't any evidence cited by the writer which can prove this claim. There is no schedule of the program that is given. In hasn't been mentioned whether the intensive program is the same for the children at beginner, intermediate or advanced levels. It might not be beneficial for a child who has just joined the ballet school as a beginner, to go through an intensive program. It might not build his/her interest in the dance. It does not mention whether the program is different for students at different levels.
There is not enough corroboration to the assertion cited that the teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies. While one company may be prestigious to one, the other would be to someone else. It is a highly ambivalent claim that has been written by the writer without any justification to the what are these prestigious companies. Moreover, since the writer claims that the teachers are extremely accomplished, there might be a possibility that the fee of enrollment in the school is very high and not affordable by a lot of parents of the children. The question is, is it feasible for a child who wants to pursue ballet dance as a hobby?
The writer mentions that many of the students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies. While this may seem a legit way to publicize a ballet school, we have no idea whether all the children who would want to join this school, would want to pursue ballet later in life or become professional dancers. Maybe, a child just want to enroll for a 2-hour class after school, because dancing is his/her hobby. The writer does not publicize on the lines of, teachers who have trained a lot of students from beginner levels to become excellent dancers, something which a child's parents would find appealing.
Therefore, the conclusion that Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child is not based on enough evidence that supports this fact and the writer has not presented us with enough examples as a justification to his claims.
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Discourse Markers used:
['if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'while']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232613908873 0.25644967241 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.170263788969 0.15541462614 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0743405275779 0.0836205057962 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0479616306954 0.0520304965353 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0239808153477 0.0272364105082 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.119904076739 0.125424944231 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0335731414868 0.0416121511921 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.67136511462 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0335731414868 0.026700313972 126% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.141486810552 0.113004496875 125% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0239808153477 0.0255425247493 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.031175059952 0.0127820249294 244% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2255.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 386.0 446.07635468 87% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84196891192 6.12365571057 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.352331606218 0.378187486979 93% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.240932642487 0.287650121315 84% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173575129534 0.208842608468 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113989637306 0.135150697306 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67136511462 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445595854922 0.469332199767 95% => OK
Word variations: 46.7971356003 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.7058823529 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4480324281 57.7814097925 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.647058824 141.986410481 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.352941176471 0.724660767414 49% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 46.7991466016 51.9672348444 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.59405940594 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53771487332 0.441005458295 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.125769202815 0.135418324435 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0495974230831 0.0829849096947 60% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.607347028945 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177603399038 0.147661913831 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.23609655449 0.193483328276 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968969273576 0.0970749176394 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.394124262459 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.106287581607 0.0774707102158 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.358730794298 0.312017818177 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681674569042 0.0698173142475 98% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 14.657635468 82% => OK
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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