A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
The author recommends that a restaurant which specializes in seafood should be opened in the Bay City as it will be very popular and profitable. He supports his claim by mentioning that there has been an increase in consumption of seafood during the last 5 years, there are no restaurants around that specialize in seafood, and majority of the people dine out. The author’s claim seems to be based on incomplete information and is not persuasive enough and therefore additional information is required to fully evaluate his argument.
To bolster his case, the author presents figures from a case study. Before relying on the data provided some details about the case study should be looked into. For example, how much of the population of the city was included in the study, was the study carried out in specific demographics? The answers to these questions will help us understand whether the study result was skewed and how reliable the data is.
In one of the supporting arguments the author claims that people are expressing concern about healthy eating. He does not mention whether seafood itself is considered as a healthy food by people of Bay City? Also, another question that arises that whether people would prefer to eat seafood amongst all the other healthy options available?
The author also mentions that there has been 30% increase in seafood consumption in the last five years. Thirty percent increase sounds very impressive but we need to know the exact amount as the actual rise in consumption may be a very small number. Percentage alone does not give the idea of how much popular seafood dishes are.
The author assumes that the restaurant will be profitable without making any mention of running costs involved. A restaurant can only be profitable if its’ cost are lower than the income. We need to find out how much will be the cost of running such a restaurant which includes shop rental, cost of the seafood supply, staff salary among other things. We also need to know how much revenue is expected in terms of sales to evaluate whether the restaurant will be profitable as suggested.
Lastly, the author assumes that people in Bay City will be interested in a specialized seafood restaurant over other restaurants available. To test the validity of the argument, we need evidence whether people would prefer specialized seafood restaurant over others available. Perhaps a survey could be carried out to find this information.
In conclusion a lot of further data is need to fully assess the argument made by the author. This includes finding out the details of the case study, whether seafood is considered healthy choice by residents of Bay City, how much was actual increase in seafood consumption and whether the running costs will be lower than the expected sales.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not on the right track.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 469 350
No. of Characters: 2284 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.654 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.87 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.569 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.32 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
What would be valid arguments
What would be valid arguments then?
This author has not answered
This author has not answered the question at all instead he is talking about what assumptions the author has made to come to the conclusion and is likely to score poorly in the actual exam as he/she didn't bother reading what the question was asking:
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 69, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hor presents figures from a case study. Before relying on the data provided some detai...
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Line 2, column 414, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as skewed and how reliable the data is. In one of the supporting arguments the a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, lastly, look, may, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99360341151 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64636382301 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460554371002 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6256467416 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.454545455 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3181818182 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.40909090909 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24978243829 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819484808387 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785366258864 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133649482785 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605308477565 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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