A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The argument posits that dental care does not play a role in preventing tooth decay. The conclusion of the argument is based on the premise that a certain demographic has a lower level of tooth decay even in the absence of dental care, therefore dental care is not necessary. The assumptions on which the argument is based, relies on no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing as it stands.
Firstly, it is readily assumed that it prudent to compare two different demographics, that is Nepal and US. It can be the case that two compared groups may have different diets. On one hand, the children indigenous to Nepal may have meals like meat, eggs veggies which are low in sugar. While, on the other hand, kids in US might be having too much of chocolates and sodas containing high sugar. This would explain the higher ratio of tooth decay among the kids in US suburbs.
Secondly, it the argument could have been more clearer if we had the actual numbers of the number of children studied. It can be the case that the survey included only hundred kids from Nepal, but from US, they surveyed ten thousand or more. In fact, it is not at all clear, if the line "little to no dental care" means that only 5 children among 1000 or 1 children among 10,000 received dental attention. The explanation to the discrepancy could be that "little to no dental care" means that children visited hospital at least once a year and had access to better dentists than the kids in suburbs.
Lastly, the argument fails to incorporate one of the key factor, the actual number of visits of a particular suburban area. It is said that the average visit is 1.25 times a year. It can be the case that among three suburbs, first one has the average of 4, second has 1 and the last one has 0. Additionally, the kids in suburban area with zero visits would be in more dire need of dental checkup than others. Hence, the term "average of 1.25" might be hiding a bigger story that not all the suburban areas have equal dental visits.
To sum up, without are more exhaustive study, which exposes more facts and figures about the two compared groups, the conclusion of the argument that dental care and tooth decay are not related is unsubstantial and is open to debate.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 405 350
No. of Characters: 1793 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.486 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.427 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.327 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.208 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.737 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.554 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 277, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...therefore dental care is not necessary. The assumptions on which the argument is ba...
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Line 5, column 43, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'clearer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: clearer
...condly, it the argument could have been more clearer if we had the actual numbers of the num...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, at least, in fact, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65925925926 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52270772386 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491358024691 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5262587053 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3157894737 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94736842105 5.70786347227 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137658135871 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434870633349 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295017415613 0.0701772020484 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0748748059989 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212329193063 0.0628817314937 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.3550499002 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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