A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The above study aims at providing some. facts which reveal that people living in Nepal, who does not have luxuries like dental care, have much lower levels of tooth decay than the ones who have in the United States. This stated facts, although gives us an insight, but with some facts being ignored.

The main factor concerning tooth decay is eating the material that reacts with the calcium of our tooth to produce decay on them. This study does not take into contrast the diet that is being consumed by both people in Himalayan region in Nepal and in the United States. If taken in stark contrast, people in United States are likely to have more consumption of the food items such as candies and aerated drinks, that would increase the tooth decay.

Atmosphere also takes a mild part in rate of tooth decay. The people living in polluted, dense and crowded suburban regions of United States would have chance of catching a tooth decay than the people living in clean, fresh and sparse areas of Himalayan regions of Nepal. As the suburbs tend to have more outbreak of contagious diseases, this could also led to some level of outbreak of some compound that could cause tooth decay, which is less likely to happen in the foothills of Himalayas in Nepal.

But the most important part not taken into consideration is how both kind of people take care of teeth. There is a higher chance that people in suburban regions of the United States would neglect to take care of their diligently due to their busy schedule or negligence. And to top that of, people in Himalayan regions tend to use actual herbs beneficial for our teeth and gums that are gardened at their foothills than the artificial substance like toothpaste, which is mostly consumed by suburban people.

The fact that the study aims to reduce the people to go to dentist for dental care is a noticeable point made, but it tends to fall flat on the very account it aims to deliver on. Regular dental care will not be needed only when we tend to give some due consideration in order to maintain our healthy teeth and gums. Else, the premise definitely falls flat.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, in fact, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 376.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69414893617 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23107547396 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497340425532 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8036092381 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.666666667 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0666666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.93333333333 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340933568322 0.218282227539 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110381394367 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118749085282 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194481676002 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103394212271 0.0628817314937 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 376 350
No. of Characters: 1712 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.403 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.553 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.182 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 61 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.809 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.618 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.108 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5