A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
The argument claims that a study conducted by Oceania University lead to result were faculty retention can be achieved if professors are offered with free tuition for their own college-aged children. This would help attracting more people towards this profession and also help to retain the existing professors. This statement doesn't provide complete information regarding the survey and making such decisions will have pros as well as cons on the University reputation. Hence, I would completely disagree with taking such decisions.
Firstly, providing free education for the college aged children of professors would be unfair to other students who are willing to join the University. Usually, Universities have limited seats available for a particular year. This is equivalent to making reservations based on caste which is followed by few universities in countries like India. Hence, this decision would limit the seats available for other students and hence will have adverse effects on Oceania Universities reputation. It will be completely unfair if a deserving candidate would not receive a seat in University just because it is offered to a student who is professors son.
Secondly, Their is no much of information provided on the study made. In order to support the decision this argument requires complete information of the study. For example, for how many years the study was made, was their a survey done to come up with this decision etc. It could be possible that the study was only specific to Oceania Universities. This decision might completely fail in other Universities. Hence, The study information should be a more verbose to understand the base of this decision. Seatown may not have same issues like Oceania university. Their could be many other reasons which would have caused issues in retention of professors.For example, Professors at Seatown may are not compatible with other professors in the University or they are not happy with their work or the quality of education providing. They might be disagreeing with the curriculum of University which is basically decided by highr management. Therefore, a proper survey should be made among professors in Seatown itself to understand the reason for their unhappiness instead of imposing the same scheme tried in some other university.
Also, Their are many alternatives to lure new professors or retain the existing professors. For example, university can provide free accommodation to professors which will definitely attract towards this profession. Instead of giving free tuition to their children university can increase professors monthly salary which would not harm the reputation of the university.
Hence, I would conclude by saying that, offering free tuition to college aged children of professors would have more cons then pros. In order to support the argument, author has to provide some strong proofs. The study made in Oceania University might not be helpful to Seatown. Hence, I would suggest to make a study separately in Seatown before taking any decision. Without all these information the statement is not convincing and decision is mare an assumption.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 498 350
No. of Characters: 2607 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.724 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.235 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.8 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 160 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.694 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.654 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.48 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 217, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to attract' or 'attract'.
Suggestion: to attract; attract
... college-aged children. This would help attracting more people towards this profession and...
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Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...the existing professors. This statement doesnt provide complete information regarding ...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
... who is professors son. Secondly, Their is no much of information provided on t...
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Line 7, column 20, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...rofessors son. Secondly, Their is no much of information provided on the stu...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
... how many years the study was made, was their a survey done to come up with this deci...
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Line 7, column 656, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...aused issues in retention of professors.For example, Professors at Seatown may are ...
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Line 7, column 842, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...lity of education providing. They might be disagreeing with the curriculum of University which...
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Line 10, column 7, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: There
...d in some other university. Also, Their are many alternatives to lure new profe...
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Line 13, column 123, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...dren of professors would have more cons then pros. In order to support the argument,...
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Line 13, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Oceania University might not be helpful to Seatown. Hence, I would suggest to ma...
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Line 13, column 333, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld suggest to make a study separately in Seatown before taking any decision. With...
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Line 13, column 383, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...before taking any decision. Without all these information the statement is not convincing and dec...
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Line 13, column 469, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing and decision is mare an assumption.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.9520958084 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2676.0 2260.96107784 118% => OK
No of words: 496.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39516129032 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89386652241 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441532258065 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.6896895765 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1111111111 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3703703704 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.59259259259 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324353541766 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926259847229 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951345374414 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205489435532 0.128457276422 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249873038652 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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