Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.
The author of the argument claims thats if anybody want to sell their home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty instead of Fitch Realty. To support his claim he shared his experience with both Adams and Fitch ten years ago he listed his home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when he sold another home, He listed it with Adams, and it took only one month.
To determine the validity of the argument, the author provide the flawed evidence in the support of his claim like he campering his 10 year's old experience with Fitch with teh year old experience with adam, which is not correct according to me as things get change in few years and here he is talking about of 10 years ago.
Secondly, he says that Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time and Adams has 40 real estate agents. But this evidence again does not talk about who are more efficient. It might me possible that the fitch worker are more efficient than adam's. So deciding the supriority on basis of number worker is not justified.
Thirdly, he says that that the Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000, but again he failed to effictive evidence in support of this. Adam's revenue could be from his different businesses also and it is also possible that adam actually face loss from in the real state business, biut because of other businesses he could manage to earn twice then fitch.
Finally, he says that the homes listed with Adams sell faster as well and to support his claim he provided his experience with both of them but in this cases he failed to mention the location of both the property that is the property that he listed with Fitch is far away from city or might in jungle that's why it took 4 month to sell that property or there may be changes that the property business was not at their boom and the propert listed with adam is at prime loaction of the city and the property business was at the boom.
In sum, the author's argument is based on the unconfirmed and unsubstantiated evidence. To make the argument flawless we need more data and information in support of the evidence he mention .
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1790 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.398 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.187 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.476 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.713 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.241 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
The author of the argument claims thats if anybody want to sell their home quic...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 18, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...r is not justified. Thirdly, he says that that the Adams revenue last year was twice a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 63, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...the homes listed with Adams sell faster as well and to support his claim he provid...
^^
Line 9, column 148, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...his experience with both of them but in this cases he failed to mention the location...
^^^^
Line 9, column 302, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...s far away from city or might in jungle thats why it took 4 month to sell that proper...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 322, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
... or might in jungle thats why it took 4 month to sell that property or there may be c...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...usiness was at the boom. In sum, the authors argument is based on the unconfirmed an...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 182, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...formation in support of the evidence he mention .
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 189, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...on in support of the evidence he mention .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49631449631 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22526884103 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474201474201 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.715497274 57.8364921388 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.5 119.503703932 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.9166666667 23.324526521 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.70786347227 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232712247906 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10430602713 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129943724634 0.0701772020484 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130733323636 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894129088071 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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