"The University of Wabash is considering a community service requirement for all undergraduate and graduate students. We believe that the objective of any university is to produce well-rounded and charitable members of society. The proposed graduation requirement would be to complete at least 8 hours of unpaid community service per month for a total of 9 months. The Dean’s office will maintain a list of approved local charities on its website with contact information. This is a fantastic opportunity for students to give back to the community and gain real-world working experience. Most importantly, local charities in need will receive the help that they need to continue their efforts."
The argument proposes some unwarranted assumptions. The community service requirement is claimed to help students gain some real-world working experience. This assumption is flawed as it does not cater to needs of students from different branches of study. The argument makes another assumption that the work done by the students will help the perpetual efforts of the local charities.
The first assumption made by the argument claims that the students will be able to gain real-world working experience. The argument fails to mention what kind of work will be done by the students. Hence, the term "real-world working experience" is vague. Students majoring in business, arts, engineering etc. will be working in different environments after graduating. Hence, the term "real-world experience" conveys different meaning for students majoring in different areas of study. The argument could have been strengthened by mentioning the specific work to be done by the students.
Another assumption made by the argument states that the work done by students will be helpful for the local charities to continue their efforts. This assumption is also vague in not mentioning what kind of efforts were undertaken by the charities. The charity might be involved in distributing clothes and study material for people in need. The charity might require the students to do some volunteering work or take care of finances.
The University wants to mould students into well-rounded individuals. Students must not be compelled to do community service. A service is something that is done out of empathy for those in need. The very move making community service into a graded course demeans the whole purpose.
Hence, the argument makes many unwarranted assumptions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 274 350
No. of Characters: 1446 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.277 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.825 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.671 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.316 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to gain real-world working experience. The argument fails to mention what kind of ...
^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing work or take care of finances. The University wants to mould students into...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, then, well, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 274.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5401459854 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12272294365 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 204.123752495 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.463503649635 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.8473053892 57% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.152163818 57.8364921388 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.9 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7 23.324526521 59% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.6 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813511051348 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0317362549449 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391530776111 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0538520421996 0.128457276422 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541111890284 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 48.3550499002 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.26 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.1389221557 65% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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