1. The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The author claims that the easement and luxuries of modern life prevent mankind from his real strong development. This is the assertation with which I generally do concur. Among the countless reasons which give adherence to my perspective, I will list the most conspicuous ones in the following paragraphs, to rear my standpoint.
The first crucial fact which should be considered is the leveled up lifestyle of contemporary life for the sake of industrial and technological development. Indeed, it is a lucid fact that the progress in the various field of technology, industry, and science, cause the individuals’ life stands to level up. A comparison of the past and current lifestyle gives an explicit view of the mentioned fact. For instance, while in the hundred years ago the main concern of the people was the preparation of their daily maintenance to survive; in modern life, those demands get pale for the increments of different sources for fulfilling these requirements. On the other hand, since the initial demand is covered by modern facilities, mankind has this chance to seek other crux purposes to flourish himself. For example, seeking a higher level of education, or exploring the universe, or dealing efficiently with the serious issues are the main care of the current people. Therefore, the luxuries and facilities of modern life lead the human being to get a step further than his previous stand in life.
Another equal striking fact which completely makes this claim shaky in the current women’s stand-in society. Actually, the role of the ladies after the industrial revolution entirely has been altered and they entered to the novel phase of their life which gave them more freedom and led them to go beyond their housekeeping chores. According to the noteworthy intelligence research conducted by the Sociology Department in Tehran University, the women’s role in the society after the industrial revelation are bolded with the sixty-five percent more than before the revelation, which shows the effect of industrial development in the enhancement of ladies’ impact in society. In another word, all the equipment for household affairs ease the women’s life, in the past the trolling in the kitchen or washing the clothes and dishes were the main responsibility of women which take their majority of times in a day; however, in the contemporary life for the sake of development in technology, different types of machines lightens these duties. Consequently, ladies possess more time to explore themselves and their surrounding; in addition, they with the better cognition own new responsibility in the society which comprehensively illustrates the impact of the current life convenience and luxuries in development of the women.
However, the dependence of mankind to the different utilities could demonstrate an addiction and failure of a person who cannot handle his jobs without these facilities. This picture could be valid in the case which the individual has this addiction; otherwise, it is not the fault of the nowadays’ equipment. Actually, the man’s mind has this feature to get used to different parameters very easily; and modern convinces and luxuries are two of this addiction list. However, this a mental state of the people which is controllable does not relate to the machines and facilities. If mankind adopts modern facilities with their usage knowledge, there will not be this kind of problem.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned facts explicitly depict the positive impacts of modern convenience and luxuries in the flourishment of the human.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3054.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31130434783 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05466961016 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511304347826 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 962.1 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.2965100615 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.428571429 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.380952381 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179347844982 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568161430503 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043419363124 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101863887741 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507404604067 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 100.480337079 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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