All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The speaker asserts that all parents should be required to volunteer time to their children’s schools. Admittedly, parents’ help is essential for elementary school students. Yet, it may be unnecessary for middle school or college students.
To begin with, parents can help their children who are learning in elementary school to acquire knowledge more quickly and more easily. Take the movie Wonder as an example. The hero in the film is a boy with facial differences who enters the fifth grade attending a mainstream elementary school for the first time. Under his mother’s help, he finally integrates into the mainstream society and can lead an independent life. Parents are crucial for the development of children, especially those in a very young age. When their parents are with them, those toddlers may feel more confident because they know there is one person who is behind them and can always back them in any circumstances.
However, parent’s help may be needless for middle school or college students. Teenage time is very important to cultivate children’s ability of independence, and they must know how to lead a life without help from parents, from trivial things like how to calculate an equation to important things like choosing to learn literature or finance as a major. Students need to make decision by themselves, not by others because they need to take responsibility by their own. For instance, Mao Zedong, the Leader of the Communist Party of China from 1943 to his death in 1976 and became the founding father of the PRC when it was established in 1949, left his parents at the age of 16 to take courses in Beijing. Without any help from his parents, he founded his own army in his 20s. In conclusion, independence can be cultivated after getting rid of help from parents.
In a nutshell, although parents’ help is necessary for toddlers who take elementary school, it is needless for teenagers who take middle school or university.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, so, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09146341463 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9452418801 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539634146341 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7455177682 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.375 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163079548488 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681554913085 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682177673893 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121304103404 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546067072289 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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